Reviews for Dance
DarkBlysse chapter 1 . 4/11/2007
The only part of it that I think doesn't flow too well is where you repeat certain words (step, step, step/flow,flow,flow). Aside from that this is just amazing!
fairEtales chapter 1 . 5/16/2006
I agree, it doesn't flow all that well, but I still loved it. It so describes the feeling when you dance. After a while, you just want to stop because your feet are so sore. But, what will happen if you stop? The ending was a little...off beat? It was kind of random. But, I loved it. Great work. Thx for the review! Loved your poem!
burning in effigy chapter 1 . 5/10/2006
Really interesting... the repetition rocked. The only thing that I didn't really like were all the commas. I realize that the poem is supposed to written this way, but so many commas distract the reader (or at least, me) from the lines. The ending was my favorite "To dance forever, until Reaper takes thee" (the "thee" seemed a little out of place though)

Overall, awesome poem!
KinaMorii chapter 1 . 5/10/2006
Nice -