|Reviews for Neutrality|
| wildwolffree17 chapter 1 . 10/4/2006
"Because still,We secretly cheer when they die,After all, we’re mentioned in the that’s all that matters right?"
This is a marvelous piece of poetry and I love the above most of all.
| Pricilla Grey chapter 1 . 5/20/2006
Interesting poem, the last line was perfect.
- Pricilla Grey
| The Watched chapter 1 . 5/16/2006
This is remarkably dark, and firstly, most importantly, I hope that, if it IS personal in any way, then you know that I'm here if you wish to talk/cry/make foolish noises or whatever.
But presuming that it isn't personal, just a good piece of poetry, it's beautifully cynical (and you know, cynicism DOES pay, in writing at least)
"Acid lies and alkaline deception"
Lovely subtlety there: a well-crafted antithetic parallelism (I'll stop sounding like a pompous shit in a minute, but it IS). And the 'express tube train' bit, whilst reminding me an awful lot of our drama performance, and possibly BECAUSE of that, is beautifully cryptic. I like the tube train metaphor because as Geoff Ryman (253 man!) explained, it's as if some people get on the train, some people don't. Some people stay on the train and see where it goes, and some people just get off, for better or worse.