Reviews for I Wish
M.D.Irvine chapter 1 . 2/11/2007
wow i think ive found a favorite! this is a great poem. ilike how she/he decides to change what the wish is and decided to wish for the pain to stop. i can relate to this the most. awesome!

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C.F. Anne chapter 1 . 2/9/2007
So sad, but it was very well written. (:
Enigmatic Night chapter 1 . 2/5/2007
Hey this is an interesting poem.

You started it off all nice and happy and slightly hopeful, however come the end we see that the poem is really quite sad and depressing.

However the very end note of the poem leaves us with a slight bit of hope that love may eventually be on it's way.

There were a few odd bits and ends, were the wording was slightly awkward, and didn't quite match the rhyming scheme, mainly the rythm of it...

e.g I look up in the sky

might sound better with

I look up inTO the sky... draws it out a little more.

Well that was my 2 cents.

L.L
Seasons-Joy chapter 1 . 6/22/2006
i love it...
StayNight chapter 1 . 5/16/2006
You have a very nice story. Its reflects people's emotion when they are heartbroken..how i wish this pain wpuld stop..