Reviews for Description: The hows, whens, and whys
Elkica chapter 1 . 5/22/2008
You manage to write a fresh, funny survey on description; (have giggled at the Two-for-one deals are fine when shopping, but not with similes). Enlightening and entertaining. Thank you for writing it.
anon chapter 1 . 5/20/2008
I loved it. There are many great tips in here, and I learned things that I hadn't realized I didn't know before. You're a very talented writer and you have a great way of explaining things, and I love the rest of your essays on writing too. You should publish something! I want to have all of your knowledge in one handy-dandy take-everywhere chunk. Book. Thing.

This essay was written a while ago but since no one else has mentioned it in a review I'll go ahead and do it. I don't usually correct grammar or spelling or whatever but it'd be cruel to leave a how-to essay on writing knowing that there are mistakes. Anyway...

- Thesaurus : In the first two paragraphs you use "or something" three times.

- Thesaurus : When you need a "word", not "work".

- The Muse : "description", not "descriptor". I think?

I only saw three, so hooray!

The Pacing and Physical Sensations are my favorite sections. It's easy to tell that you put yourself into this and that you actually enjoyed writing it. That's rare in 'how-to's. It's a refreshing oasis in the middle of a hot desert, that quenches your thirst like you've never been thirsty before. Thanks to you, Readers are able to take the first steps back into the desert with their heads held high, having gained something. Thank you, kind soul!


A cliche, a simile, and an extended metaphor.

Hopefully I've saved your friend's fingers. I can't even tell. Those sentences are a mess and I'm not the best at describing with similies and metaphors. Ha.

Long review is LONG. Bye.
Marie Silver chapter 1 . 5/16/2008
Great advice with a smattering of humour. Loved it.

~Marie Silver~
half-sketched.staccatos chapter 1 . 9/23/2007
konnichi wa

I had a real laugh for this one; thanks a million for posting it, LoL. I used - like most people - skip over descriptions in books because they were *boring*. Until I started writing... and realized that I had zero to no descriptions. :( So I started reading (and continue to do so) every single little word in every single book I pick up. And now my writing's better, thank God. Not good - no, I wouldn't go that far - but better.

"Thesaurus: Friend or Ally?"

- Hah! That was cute! I was sitting there for a couple of seconds (my mind seems to be on the fritz today), thinking, "Wait... Ally? And friend? Aren't they... Oh!" LoL.

"the Tooth Bunny, and the Easter Fairy"

- cute, cute, cute. :)

"How does a person’s voice sound like a violin"

You see, that's weird because this sentence makes perfect sentence to me. I can totally hear someone's voice "sounding like a violin." It would be sort of nasally and forlorn and... never mind. I'm rambling. This is what comes with playing piano for so long (and still sucking, LoL).

See, I always felt weird because I NEVER used metaphors. I would try, but it would sound like it was REAL. So I stopped... thank you for clarifying: it sounded real because I write fantasy! Oops... LoL, thanks for clarifying that. :)



P.S: Love your website! :D
Elizabeth More chapter 1 . 5/27/2007
An informative essay *and* a few good laughs! Way to go! :) Actually, I thought this was written more like a speech.

I always admire those who do description really well. I feel like I repeat the same things over and over again...:( I'm putting this one on my favorites, too! Thanks, Sage!

God bless,


P.S. And forgive the short review; I'm kind of hurrying so I have time for one more before I get off here. I have to get some writing done tonight...
echo-of-a-tear chapter 1 . 2/15/2007
I cannot describe to you my utter delight at knowing that somewhere, somehow, a struggling writer may read this, understand it, and something in their brain just might respond!

Ridiculous netspeak and shameless anachronism are plaguing the online writing world, as are short, non-descriptive and jumbled sentences that make no sense. What's more, these people often get charming and praise-filled reviews from their young and equally untalented peers who, like them, have no writing experience and subsequently think that it's quite wonderful!

Perhaps this will knock some word-sense into their brains. We can only hope.


marinawings chapter 1 . 11/7/2006
this is some excellent writing advice! i wish i had read this before i posted some of my earlier stories on this site, haha. i'm actually thinking of going back and completely rewriting them because of all the writing errors. anyway, thanks a lot for writing this. anyone who reads this should tell you the same!
Siyaa chapter 1 . 9/16/2006
Very useful information. I am by no means a great writer or even a, heck with it, FAIRLY GOOD one, so this was very helpful. Lol, I've already written something today that went against most of this.
xForeverAndAlwaysx chapter 1 . 8/29/2006
Hey Therese! It's Kate - I finally got myself a fictionpress account! Anyway I have to say that I love your writing, and this essay is really good. It's informative and still manages to be fun, which is awesome. Great job, and by the way, i'll see you soon.
Fiore Chnudth chapter 1 . 8/16/2006
As so often the case with these "how to" essays, its fun and in part interesting to read.

I say in part interesting, because I personally will have little use for it, as I do not use POV but the all-knowing-all-seeing-all-understand third person.

But this will not keep me from getting something from it. The thoughts on the use of metaphors and similes I can agree with. Although I don't think they have to be banned altogether from stories with no POV.

But all in all, fun to read.


John Enverga chapter 1 . 6/24/2006
I thought it was a very helpful essay. I learned a lot. Very good advice!
Himura-Dumbledore chapter 1 . 5/17/2006
Good essay, I'll try to apply what I've learnt...
Bitter Irony chapter 1 . 5/16/2006
This essay was like a pop-up from a porn site. No matter how hard I tried, I couldn't get myself out of it (in this case, because I was so wraped up in your wit-in the case of the porn pop-ups, it's because that little x in the corner never works). Sorry, I can't think up an extended metaphor. I guess my friends will just have to be chopped to pieces. Sorry, buddies.
Limited Edition chapter 1 . 5/16/2006
I had fun reading this. I can't say I learnt a lot, but it was fun.
Toothache chapter 1 . 5/16/2006
You should write a book titled "Fiction storytelling for Dummies." Except that's copyrighted, I think, so maybe something like.. "Can't write? Too bad. Maybe this'll help you." Or something like that? Haha.

Awesome essay though. It's going to my fave stories list. :)
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