|Reviews for Against Obscurity|
| wee-rebz chapter 5 . 1/30/2007
this is a great story. takes a bit of time to get ur head round, but i like and, and the characters...theres a lot to them, and a lot still to learn, which is important and great.
| Alteng chapter 4 . 9/7/2006
Yes, I have been busy with this story.
Hattie really must have liked that sailor a lot indeed!
Dialect is a pain! I have used it on a couple of occasions, and I want to bang my head!
| Alteng chapter 3 . 9/7/2006
I am in the process of catching up on my readings. This was rather sweet about Hattie and the sailor. I also like the way you have created con-artist, but you have kept it in the feel of the time.
| Sean Taylor chapter 4 . 8/4/2006
So, she gave up that which she never would have given, I wonder why she is so loyal to this sailor lad not to sell that necklace, perhaps she loves him?
I haven't heard the term 'tinker' used much in most recent stories, however I think it works better here that calling her a 'traveler'.
Good work, Mellon nin.
| Sean Taylor chapter 3 . 7/29/2006
Hm, I wonder if this lass is actually starting to feel bad about robbing this sailor lad. Does she actually have feeling for him, or just sad that she robbed him blind?
Short, simple and so eloquently to the point chapter. Excellent work Frankie-lass.
| Sean Taylor chapter 2 . 6/20/2006
A rather sad story actually, I wonder if the girl harbored the same feelings for him as he did for her, and if so was it for the same reasons. Perhaps they might meet again, but I fear her father wouldn't allow it, but there is always hope...
| Alteng chapter 2 . 5/31/2006
It is a long story about how I read stories. I take an hour long bus ride to and from work. It's boring, so I will read several chapters en route.
Hattie is a quiet little flirt! After all, she goes gallavanting about with a sailor that she has just met. Tsk! Tsk!
And Jared, who thought her too pure to bed, sure as heck was ready and willing. This could be some subtle humor there, but then again, I am a rather twisted individual.
I like how he runs off, because Daddy Dearest comes along, though.
| Alteng chapter 1 . 5/31/2006
Indeed, I understand about having a story in many and various versions and different writing styles. Mostly, I did this with Irony of Fate.
Anyway, another well written story. This is why I put you on my author alert. You do write masterfully (and your grammar is good, too).
This most definately sets a person up for the story, and it does make me wonder what happened.
I like that last line: This, like all other stories that end in tears, begins with a kiss and a smile.
It gives the story a nice feel.
| wee-rebz chapter 2 . 5/24/2006
wow, excellent. i just love the wee phrases you have, your writing is great! keep up the good work!
| Lessien Telperin chapter 1 . 5/19/2006
very melancholy...i can't describe how personal and...yeh i dunno what word to use..lol major props! please continue soon!
| Partial Trouble chapter 1 . 5/18/2006
Very nice chapter, made me really want to read the rest! As always your description is powerful and you hint at a greater depth than a few words can show. The only slight downside was that sentence about retreats being reatreats- convoluted, had to read it very good though! I will try and read more, if that had been the first chapter of a book I'd picked up I would have bought it.
| Sean Taylor chapter 1 . 5/18/2006
Wohoo, new story from da' Frankie lady!
Little more serious beginning that yuor other stuff, I like it though, shows range of ability and also maturity as a writer. Its very somber, I wonder if this will set the mood to come, or just the mood of the character who is narrating.
Keep it up, Mellon nin!