heh heh.

ohh amora...

now you know I would love to give you plot advice but to do that I would be drawing on my own experiences and thats not a good thing because all of this is seeming way to much like what happened to me minus the other firend who appears to have a crush. Not to mention I have recently found out that low and behold my ex is coming back to my school so much for my last year being a peaceful one. I am just afraid of what is going to happen. Anyways it is sad to hear that you aren't feeling good and you have my hope that they are able to figure out what is wrong and fix it. Anyways keep up the good work.

To be honest it takes a little from the story if you put the control in the reader's hands. I mean the excitement and mystery is toned down just a bit because we'd have some inclination of what could happen being we openly suggested it.

But that's just me though one thing has been bugging me and that is Ha. Well to put it bluntly who the hell is Ha. I know she's Jacqueline's girlfriend, but for the most part that's all she is. Just a name attached to this mystery character who's been in the background oblivious to it all.

If I were to offer any kind of plot suggestion, bring Ha in and give her something to do. Hell bring the girl in swinging after finding about Jaqueline's and Amora's kiss. Or better yet have her start to question the fidelity of their relationship in the first place and the kiss was the final straw. Or have her come to Amora in need of advice as she suspects Jacqueline me be seeing someone but has no idea it's Amora. Well that's my two cents I'm pretty much infatuated with Ha now...yeah it's sad.

Great chapter as always, I wish i could make mine this length. I'm going to upload another unmerciful 19pg chapter tomorrow, I adore patient people.

yo, wuts up ! ... well, i like your update and to answer your questions, i thionk that there should be a love triangle between JJ, Amora, and Lina ... drama drama drama right ?... heehee... how did u manage to get strep for that long ?

That ending... was priceless. You rawk!

And thats is the conversation that I kept wishing would come and I wish that I would have realized it earlier that my ex would just do the same thing over. So knowing what it feels like to want someone back but knowing they are no good for you is something I can relate to. So keep up the good work.

Wow, that was a really good chapter. You could really feel how Amora was feeling, I really liked it. Update soon.

Good chapter, a little more into Amaora's shattered life, and the responsibilities she must take for her actions. I like that fact she's mature enough to understand the possible ramifications of being with Jacqueline once more. It had such a sad vibe, great work once more.

tee hee, i wonder if i'm the first reviewer/ heh i guess you know who i am by my unusual punctuation/stupid effing keyboard...anyway, lovely chappie. lovely quotes. some parts in dialogue were jarring. but we've talked about that before. emotions felt very realistic and...yeah. [grin] lovely

hey, how's it going ?... i was wondering... you said in ur intro that this story is partially based on ur own life, correct?... well, u said "us texans" and i was wondering wut city cuz i live in san antonio and if u do live in SA then since in this story u go to an all girls catholic school then u would go to providence h.s. ... well, newayz i was just wondering and, by the way, I LOVE UR STORY !

Wow, this is really good. Update soon.

I understand what you are saying in this chapter and I believe it. Keep up the good work.

"Soon, I’ll be labeled, just like Jacqueline. When people utter my name, with it will come the assumed “lesbian” stereotype. The word will come to haunt me. It will no longer be a small part of me, but a small part stuck under a big magnifying glass for the whole world to see. They will then categorize me with the term “lesbian”, and instead of being myself, I will become part of a label, a statistic. My sexuality will not be something of pride, but rather, something trampled and shamed by the ignorance of people who just don’t understand or choose not to. It will not be special, a treasured secret that I reveal only to an exclusive few. It won’t be a part of me; I will be a part of it-the greater view of homosexuality by the general public. I will lose my individuality to being a lesbian, and that’s not something I want to happen. I am not “a lesbian”. I am me."

wow... you're an AMAZING writer.

Ah, summer winds down and the sudden progression of plot forumulates in your mind. It's it weird how at the middle of June you have all these ideas about what's going to happen and all this time to pound out chapters, but before you know it's the the end of July and one chap, then Aug and all of a sudden all those ideas rush back. Don't worry about it, it happens to everyone during summer break, it's a time to just do stuff and no one actually finishes a story during those wonderfully warm three months!

I really like how you take such care with this story, the indepth layers you've given to characters, each time you introduce a supporting character you build them to a relatable level with desires and goals within the story. It creates such great conflict while constantly enforcing the value of friendship throughout.

As for this chapter you did an excellent monologue of Amora's inner turmoils. It's so true how society is so quick to dismiss one's nature in the face of straying from 'normal' By a mere term your humanity is stripped away leaving only sinful creature carrying a deadly epidemic called personal acceptance. I really feel bad for her which really shows how well you crafted Amora. She's not just a character is a story ,Amora is the embodiment of millions of teenages across the world who strive to be just that, a teenger just like they were ten seconds before someone found out they were gay.

Sorry for going so far off topic but I'm so into this story, yeah I need a life. As always keep up the excellent work!

heya chicka, you know my feelings about this chapter (in detail) already. :D chats are fun fun for everyone. can't wait til the new chapter is up! and also, that last line still kills me. brilliant. *_*