Uh oh! What's Avery going to do? Ahh, the suspense is killing me. I wanted to say that I am in love with both of your storie, but I think that this is my favorite one. I never did like Christine that much, but Em was always totally awesome. Can't wait to read more...I'm actually supposed to be writing my History Essay, whoops.

please update.

me gustacontinue soon ]

i am completely in love with this story! you are such an amazing writer... please for my sanity could you update a.s.a.p i need to know what happens...Thanks so much for putting a smile on my face tonight... i needed it

CheersMichelle

Hey, awesome story dudette! Seriously, I started it last night, and just got around to finishing it today and I'm addicted! Seriously, one of the better stories I've read on this site. I love the fact that you don't have to get too much into detail with your characters before you feel familiar with them. Very good.

I read your profile, you're from St. Paul? Thats pretty awesome. Thats the closest location to me I've ever seen on here (I'm from Duluth). I was begining to think no other Minnesotans had FP accounts.

Anyway, keep up the awesomeness! See ya next chapter.

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Oh my god. I just wrote this fantastic, long review and it got deleted. Really. It was maybe the best review I've written in a month. The fictionpress gods hate me. Obviously. So, let's try this again.

I had been trying to wean myself off of romance stories on fictionpress and you have sufficciently severed any hope I had of doing so (okay, so if I was really serious about this resolution I wouldn't have clicked on the story but STILL)... this is fantastic. There's so much I love about this story. Hell, there's so much I love about this chapter. Actually, yea, about that. I feel like the last two or three chapters have really shown growth in your writing... I could be completely wrong, but that's what I thought.

I love how you shatter the cliches by playing around with them. You don't avoid cliches, you embrace them. And then tackle them and make them your own. It's fantastic. Emily isn't like the other lead characters. She's also not like every other character that's been abused. She's like someone you know in real life, and it's so refreshingly fantastic. And Joshua. Obviously I love Joshua because he doesn't play football or walk around in a leather jacket smoking cigarettes. The vegetarianism was maybe my favorite little detail. It was so PERSONAL, dammit. And it just fit. Wow. I loved it.

I think the most compelling part of the story for me was when he said "no wonder your exboyfriend used to hit you" and then he didn't apologize. It took me a few reads through that entire section and it just kind of blew me away that you didn't have him do the right thing. And that's okay. That's in character because we know he's a good guy and he said something to hurt her and he doesn't regret that because... well, we get it, anyways.

So yea. Also, kudos on using characters of a different ethnicity. I've been searching for stories that don't revolve around BlondeHairedGods and girls with PaleSkin. It was, again, refreshing.

The only little criticism I have is that maybe you mention the ethnicity too much? I don't know if it's necessary... there was one part where Emily called herself an "innocent little biracial girl"(I think) and while that scene was cute and all, I didn't think it seemed very realistic for her to say that. I'm ethnic myself and I don't necessarily bring it up in regular conversation... I don't know. That is, really, the only criticism I have,though.

Congratulations on completely hooking me on to your story!

This story is incredibly addictive; I LOVE the characters. I can't wait for the next chapter!

This is great! It was kinda confusing in the beginning with all the names.. but I get it now ;) and God I want those triplets in my home. They sound hot, heh.

Joshua & Em are so cute! Pfft, don't like Christine. She was being bitchy against Em and I'm protective of her ;)

In the last chapter I kinda felt sorry for Em.. when he said it was no wonder her ex used to hit her around. Ouch. But he was stressed out I guess.. and them together in the sleeping bag was aww. ) &Also that she kissed him full on the lips when she got out for work! It's natural Em, don't fight it.

Hope you update soon!

oh this story had me aweing in someparts, gripping my seats in others and laughing my head off! i love it! it's so awesome just like your other! two totally different stories and they both have their seperate quirks and charms! i love them to bits! please update soon

Hahaha..this is such an awesome story!

Great characterization and a strong plot.

Emily and Josh are soo cool!

Hahaha.

Keep up the great work and update soon!

;)allie

Hahaha..what a way to end a chapter.

It's cool that Emily still goes through standard procedure with Betty, even though she know's she's healthy.

And Josh is still the sweetest character alive.

;)allie

Good golly!

Christine is a buttface.

Does Robby like Emily, too? Eh.

Josh is still awesome.

So are Brittany and Li.

;)allie

Aww!

;)allie

Aww...Josh is so sweet!

;)allie