Reviews for Yawn
Chandra-Moon chapter 1 . 5/23/2006
Interesting, short poem. I like it because you didn't summarize it at the end, and yet you did. "And waste five minutes warming up" was a good ending. I thought it could have been more interesting, more descriptive. I like your short, stacatto rhythm, but it's a bit boring, and instead of sounding short and brief, it sounds monotone "Step out of warm bed." It's an interesting style with potential-make a it a bit more unique, more noticeable.