Sort of had mixed reactions with that chapter, it was a Yay another chapter, but a Aww its over. A good ending though, it rather suits the story a happy ever after wouldn't suit the characters that you have created. I hope you start another story soon. And good work!

*laugh* What a great ending. I must say, this story is truly under appreciated. You wrote it very well, a dark story, and yet still ridiculously funny at parts. Great job!

This was the perfect ending for this story. It couldn't have happened any other way. I mean really could you even imagine them having a cookie-cutter happily ever after ending? No, they had a kick ass ending.

I'm really sad it had to end. Are you planning on doing a sequel?

Ok well, this was a great story and I hope you write some more great stories.

Wow, this is an amazing read. Not amazing, something way more cool than amazing. But my vocab will not come to me now, because this was just pure awesomeness! This is some gansta stuff here. I felt connected with almost all of the characters you depicted in the story. It was like I could understand what they were thinking, and agree, strangely. I was glad that Narkall got what he deserved. And that, well... the ending of this chapter almost seemed like the end of everything. But yet the Council waits, and it's a pretty good cliff hanger. Letting Rakal endulge in her sadness for a good cry, with Belus there to comfort her. Really good story, really good flow. A few spelling and gramatical errors but nothing to send people screaming away. I still read on in ecitment and ignored them (I would help correct but it was too suspensful and I'm not the type to do so) But that is a plus too, the suspense was great. And kicking ass, especially a female kicking ass is always a trait I adore to connect with. I mean who does not enjoy kicking butt! That was some... interseting and compelling, oh forget that, it was straight up G! Please continue on! This is positively going to be a favorite of mine.

Oh my God. I'm so happy you liked my review. I thought it was the least I could for you since you hade the creativity to come up with this story. Everything I said I meant. I'm not the kind of person that flatters people just because. If somethings good I'll say.

Ok so now about the chapter. Oh jeez you left a cliffhanger. Come on, I'm already sad you can only update so often, now I have to live with the suspense. Its just not fair. Oh and you don't have any "glaring" mistakes like you asked but you do have some spelling errors, but whatever even published writers have spelling errors. What matters is that your story is good.

Can't wait for your next update!

Hey I found your story a couple of days ago but I didn't want to up date until I finished reading all of it. I've got to say that this story totally kicks ass. I like how you have developed your characters especially Rakel. I like how you didn't make her some poor helpless, damsel in distress type character. It kind of surprised me when she was the one who made the first move with Belus. I don't know why it surprised me, I really should have guessed it from your author's notes and from some of the stuff you wrote about the Hunchback of Notre Dam. You don't sound like the type of girl who sits back and waits to be rescued and neither do your characters. I'm going to be sad when you finish writing this story. There really aren't that many writers out there as good as you.

i thought sarah went home why is she there. and isnt it a good idea that she goes to the dance the man wont attack her there right

I absolutely love it, please keep writing :D I have to say this is probably the best story I've read so far on FictionPress.

i enjoyed the chapter. and wats to happen woth rakel now the belus is gone. narkall is in the building and the valintines dance is approaching soon. sorry if i butchered your characters names. i cant wait until the next update.

NO! You must fight the block with all your mighty might! :P Seriously though, that was a cool wee chappy, I do love Belus's snarkyness. My fav line was "and shit on toast..." hehe I like that saying.

I like your story, it's interesting and different. I think it's neat how you use footnotes. Please update soon. (;

That was a very philosophical bit at the start, really well written, but I have come to dispise philosophy since I started studying it. :P Still, it really hits the creepy nail on it's head with Narkall's character. I so can't wait to see what kinda trouble finds Rakel, that should be really interesting to read.

Oh and I liked the use of "anon". :D

No i dont want it to end i love this story. And so the council suspects belus of the theft? And rakel and belus are going to continue their little thing i guess. I enjoyed the chapter and i cant wait for the next

I loved the line "just a tad bit saucier", it made me laugh. Good chappy, poor Rakel though, she really can't seem to hang on to happiness for long can she?

im loving your story so far. i hope u update soon.