Reviews for Treacherous Beauty
A.V.Mackie chapter 28 . 1/18/2008
Woo! They got it together at last, sneaky wee "GothBitch", heh I like that nickname, tis humourous. Very well done, rather intense scene, I can't wait for more.
A.V.Mackie chapter 27 . 12/22/2007
Great chapter! I don't think the last chapter was horrible or anything but, yeah a bit of rewriting wouldn't do any harm. :P

Love your quote at the end, very to the point. *wink wink*
Sillyscrat chapter 27 . 12/22/2007
Gosh, I love your writing style. So expressive. The way you compared the... would you call it a school board?... to cows made me laugh. I could actually SEE them chomping at their food, dumb expressions on their faces. And the end of this chapter-*grins*. Can't wait for the net installment. And that quote is pure genius.
A.V.Mackie chapter 26 . 11/29/2007
Just caught up on the last three chappys and remembered just how good this story is, so much emotional conflict, so much self loathing. (poor Belus) Heh, I really like his character, totally putting himself down because hes in wuv with the girl, I keep giggling at his comments when he cuts a slightly naughty thought off. :D Keep the good stuff coming.
Cadaverous Apples chapter 25 . 11/4/2007
Heh. The killing the chicken thing-been through that WAY too many times. My grandmother also felt the need to inform me on how to properly kill a chicken-numerous times. Also, really like the friendship between Rudolphus and Rakel. I think I just like Rudolphus in general, though.

And...I might be confusing a few different vampire myths here, but I was under the impression that a fully dead vampire (Belus and Rakel, although I'm probably getting the terminology mixed up) were DEAD. As in, their hearts didn't beat. I thought that that was one of the key differences between them and the rest of the vampires. Am I getting things confused, making them up, or am I right...?

And pukey blood-ew. How long is it going to last? What's going to make it stop? (I know all will be explained, but I can't help asking)

Great writing, as usual. Keep it up!
Mrs. MJackson chapter 24 . 10/18/2007
hey, i really likey our story. glad i found it, it's great! updae soon.
Mrs. MJackson chapter 1 . 10/15/2007
i love chapter one already, cant wait to read the rest! i know i'mma be pleased! lol.
DeLayNee chapter 24 . 10/14/2007
he might . . . have a small . . . attraction to the girl

-why, is that acceptance I hear?

But he had such a firm control over his emotions that it should hardly matter—

-and here hath be that denial

I shall have one more go at it, just one more. Then I will rest. . . .

- sure buddy. And I just so happen to have Klingon grandparents

'have a hernia and get over it.'

-How I love you.
Wayward Ballerina chapter 24 . 10/13/2007
*Sighs* I really wasn't in the mood for a hernia today. P But I'm sure I'll survive.

Once again, a fantastic chapter. The breakfast was rather amusing, especially when Belus indulged Mrs. Martings (heh).

Can't wait to see some more.

Lady Silver fang chapter 24 . 10/12/2007
This was a great chapter. Update soon!
Cadaverous Apples chapter 23 . 9/19/2007
So...I used to be A Snowflake's Kiss, before I sorta abandoned my account, and then refound it recently and got all dark and morbid and changed the name. While screwing around, I found the review I had written for you, and then had to go reread the story...and was immensely happy to find so many new chapters (not to mention that you responded to my other review!). Sorry for abandoning you-now that school's back, I'll be avoiding homework as much as possible, thus keeping up to date on your story, considering it's one of my favorites. DEFINITELY like the whole private lessons with Belus. If you're going to expand their relationship (which you are obviously doing) that would be an easy/fun way to do it (you already did).

Totally creepy how Narkall is inside the Red Room, inside the school. And no one knows! Scaryscary.

Rudolphus seems pretty crazy. The drunkeness is awesome. But I'm wondering, is his and Rakel's relationship going to develop? (friendship) Because they don't really have much interaction yet...

Keep up the wicked sweet writing-I'll keep checking back!
Sillyscrat chapter 12 . 9/17/2007
First off, I must congratulate you on a engaging story amidst the ... other stuff on fictionpress ;). I'm sorry that I can't finish reading now-I have school tomorrow morning and have yet to do my calc hw. Anyways, terrific story. I especially love the little lines you finish your chapters with. They are always so hard-hitting and... just plain awesome. I can't think of a good way to describe them. You'll have to read over your story again and look for typos. That's the main thing I've noticed that needs correction. The coherency of your sentences is so refreshing on this website. It's so difficult sometimes to find an actual story that I'd enjoy following. Your characters are very unique-I love Rakel and Hayell. I really hope they get together (I admit to skimming through a couple later chapters looking for more interaction :x . Romantic at heart here :P ).

Great story. I'll catch up on this eventually. If I don't, I give you permission to remind me via email/violence/or whatever. I doubt you'll actually do that, but seeing as I'm a rather forgetful person, I figured I should warn you :)

Keep writing.
Lady Silver fang chapter 23 . 9/17/2007
Nice Chapter. I enjoyed it! There were just maybe a case or two were you forgot to put in a word but other than that it was a good read as the last twenty-two chapters have been! I look forward to your next update. _
DeLayNee chapter 23 . 9/15/2007
Haha, yes. The post, the most obvious way. ]

'Guess he couldn’t have cared all that much if he found it in him to leave like that'

-hm... Is she starting to care for him, perchance? [beyond the attraction?]

She’d lost so much: her childhood, her virginity, her father, her friends; and all to a power-hungry despot.

-I know it's been said before, by my Goddess, this is so horrible... my heart weeps for her.
A.V.Mackie chapter 23 . 9/15/2007
I just finished reading all the way up to here and I'm loving it. I love the characters, the setting (kinda like a dark Hogwarts), and the pace of it all. You, I think like the word laggardly...a bit too much maybe. :P Great stuff though, I'm waiting avidly for the next chapter!
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