I finally finshed up to this point! YAY! I have to say this story is wonderful. I am really enjoying the thought of Belus and Rakel together. They are the perfect couple with very similar moods. Anyhow. Besides those two I love your other characters, you give great descriptions and all that other good stuff. I look forward to your next update! _

Wow. I have to say this is a interesting story so far. I can't wait to continue reading it! _

oh my god! what the hell's wrong with rakel? and why isn't she talking to belus about it? they seem so perfect for eachother, by the way.

i love this story so much - absolutely fantastically written and planned; you have such a great style, and i can't wait to see what happens next.

i also love how you've really thought about the whole vampire thing, and have expanded everything to be so much more than the usual, boring cliche characteristics etc. like how there are living and undead vampires, and how only the undead ones can survive on only blood, and their eyes and hair change colour when they reach a certain age. awesome stuff.

azure skye x

Pretty sure throwing up blood is not one of those things that would just make Rakel's day all happy and complete. So it's bad. Crap.

'...and her power, instead of being an albatross, became a great aid— or, at least, it now had the potential to be. It was like a sheathed sword, its blade razor sharp.' -love that analogy

'the more he became all talk and less play'- Is Jem developing a crush or something? Or is he finally coming to terms with the fact that she is just so much better than him?

'Somewhere in the dark recesses of her mind, something chuckled.' -whoah! is Narkall in her mind?

'Her eyes had taken on a milky texture, as though she were slowly turning blind, but her concentration upon her prey was undaunted.' - Question: can vampires feed off of other vamps? And why doesn't he want her using her anger? It's enabling her to win against him, isn't it?

I think your story is amazing. One of the best that I have ever read. I don't understand why you only have 66 reviews for how many chapters you have written. It's such a wonderfully original and addictive story. I could only wish to be half as good as you with my story. I'm just blown away and I can't wait for the next chapter!

Jinna

Great two chapters, and the last POV was wonderful- especially the last two sentences.

I absolutely enjoy reading this story. I can't wait to find out what happens next. Sounds promising. Hope to see an update soon. Take care.

please update this it is so god i love it

she was immensely, psychotically powerful

-more so than a normal vamp her age?

But perhaps it wasn’t so serious. Perhaps he didn’t love her. Yes, that was it. A passing fancy, a stupid action that he would, no doubt, pay for later but that didn’t necessarily mean anything.

-haha, I think this is funny, him trying to convince himself of that

She would be angry, granted, when he shut her out

-OR EXTREMELY sad...

By Friday all her hope of ever really seeing them again had gone

-*sad*

-Wait, were their bodies found? Sorry if you told us this already

On his wall, there was a collection of twenty-something pictures of this beautiful princess in sleep,

-Is Belus stronger than him? And, btw, you write a great obsessed/insane/bad guy

Really, really good. Very emotive. I look forward to reading more.

I absolutely love your story! I'm still catching up I just started reading it yesterday and I'm almost to the chapter you left off on and all i can say is I want belus and Rakel to hook up! There is nothing uncouth or nasty about it! keep up the wonderful work I can't wait to read more!

Hot damn what a chapter. That was intense! Great job, and god i hope you update soon.

-Danny

Here's me, wanting to press the 'Next Chapter' button. I love this story so much... ARG! -Luffles story.- I started reading it today, and finished it today... Oh my gawd... It's so good... I love these kind of stories.

Alright... It's a tad bit confusing the way it's wrtten, but once you read further, you get it...

I love your style of writing, too.

Love,

Pascale.

Beautifully poignant :) well worth the wait! :)

CLIFFHANGER!

This is such an amazingly awesome story!

It's amazing Rakel left Jem alive after that, but he's such a dork anyway, no one whould have really missed him, if he had died. Though it would be a shame if she couldn't hit him anymore.

You're really great with describing emotions and you stick to the characters really well, they're not suddenly changing overnight. I like seeing Rakel and Belus together, but you shouldn't rush it (which you're not, so I'm not critiscizing you).

Keep up the good work!