Reviews for The Merchant's Daughter
Les-Innocent-Provocateur chapter 4 . 8/29/2007
I should be doing my history homework, only your story is far too delightful to ignore. The parts that are intended to be emotional truly are and your characters are true to their era. It's suburb!

Best wishes,

Miss Sugar
Iron Pyrate chapter 3 . 9/1/2006
I like this a lot so far, and I don't think the words are too 19th century at all. I'm curious to see Jeanine's motive for boarding a ship since she's so prim and proper and thinks they're big, clunky, and smelly. Her character is a nice change from the tomboyish females who've also boarded ships, like Art, Jacky, and Nancy.
superheroesarereal chapter 3 . 6/15/2006
Cute...:two NON-CROOKED thumbs up: ) The only thing was that there were a couple of grammatical issues...well...not so much grammatical issues but you started a couple of sentences with but and some paragraphs seemed a little choppy. I don't know...maybe that's what you meant to do? w/e it was still awesome and i still think you're awesome to
A.H. Fenald chapter 3 . 6/14/2006
Aww...I like it. It was cute. I hope Jeanie will be okay.
superheroesarereal chapter 2 . 6/3/2006
helo this chapter was awesome ahaha "life in labor" oh well you prolly already fixed it by now and i already told you everything i have to say except that this chapter rocks my socks...ALL of them...even the ones in my CLOSET bye love
A.H. Fenald chapter 2 . 5/29/2006
I really like. I can't wait to read the next thing that you will do next!
Feaz87 chapter 1 . 5/29/2006
This story is really good and I really like your use of dialouge. A little word of advice: try not to make it TOO 19th Century as far as the dialouge is concerned because people could become bored with it. Trust me, I learned that the hard way earlier on in my fiction writing career.

All in all, good story and I'm looking forward to reading more. Keep it coming.


Please read my 9/11 Drama "One Day in September" and review it as well. Thanks.
superheroesarereal chapter 1 . 5/24/2006
hi lovely ) teehee this story is awethum just like you...ahaha umm the only thing is that in the beginning part where it says "minor little crowd", it struck me as unecessary (sp? i HATE this word)and m it seems like you didn't get into the story( if you know what I mean) until halfway through the beginning...i think...maybe...i dunno...i'm hungry and i can't think...well it's good...better than your other stuff i think...except i did like that one on your xanga ) bye
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