|Reviews for Mastermind|
| The Mumbling Sage chapter 2 . 5/29/2006
The plot in great, but some parts are confusing and hard to read. Re-read everything you write. If it doesn't look like something you'd find in a published work, rewrite it until it does. For your readers, it will be worth the wait.
| The Mumbling Sage chapter 1 . 5/24/2006
The first paragraph was a good way to explain the background, but 'Take this boy for example' seemed kind of inappropriate for the story. You also had some their/there confusion, but the rest of the story looks great. I can't wait to see where it goes.