Reviews for connect the dots chapter 1 . 8/10/2006
Beautiful piece. A few typos here and there ("you" instead of "your in the 2nd line, and using "will" twice as line enders...rhyming them with each other is the problem there), but for the most part, really gorgeous. Some of the alliteration in here is pefect ("satin silk stretching" and "send you streamlined straight" really stick out to me), and the images are divine. Keep writing! :)
a lonely september chapter 1 . 6/28/2006
the last three lines really got to me. mostly the last one after the two before it. this was amazingly written. i'm pretty much astounded by you right now.
k chapter 1 . 6/23/2006
i love it. you are incredible, miss kiley.
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 6/10/2006
the whole dots thing and all teh descriptions are beautiful.. awesome piece
gnimrodd chapter 1 . 5/25/2006
"a boy that I like and could love: dial up through corkscrewwires and send you streamlined straightto me."

oh so good. delectable in the deepest meaning of the word. you rock my poetic world, eileen.
moralofthestory chapter 1 . 5/25/2006
That's Amazing. The words loop and slide in my mind like puddles of time