|Reviews for Chronicles of Dusk|
| AbstractWorld chapter 1 . 2/22/2012
Love how you told this story from a Story Teller's persepctive and not just in first through third person. The last part with the definitions of the different swords ect. that you used was useful as well! Pending on reading more or not though...
| Angelo Christian chapter 1 . 9/2/2008
THAT was an interesting chapter. I had to stop every once in a while to finish it but finish it I did. Takehiko Minoru sounds like the cliched badass, cocky hero that is seen in many mangas and animes but HEY that is why we love mangas and animes in the first place.
However, there is one thing that bugs me and I do not know if you did this intentional or not. When Takehiko Minoru was talking and each subsequent paragraph that follows is him still talking. I do not remember the rule of this grammar but I do hold it to you that you look it up. Dialogue from Character A can either be followed up with Character B or a descriptive slash narrative paragraph which may continue with Character A.
That is all. Cool chapter!
| ByYourSide chapter 1 . 3/25/2008
Very anime-style! I want to see where you're going with this!
| Spirit Tigress chapter 11 . 3/25/2008
I noticed that you switch between the present and past tense; no big deal though.
This is the first time I've read a story where the main character doesn't hook up with the first girl he meets.
| Spirit Tigress chapter 10 . 3/25/2008
Takehiko's the farthest thing from a fool now...
Now I'm finally gonna see what Ren can do on her own.
| Spirit Tigress chapter 9 . 3/25/2008
I really like this story because it makes me think and is a quick read
| Spirit Tigress chapter 8 . 3/25/2008
Weird...Serkan's the name of one of my villians...
Pretty smart of Chinatsu to hide within a circus troupe and disguising spirit energy within livers and passing them of as meat.
| Spirit Tigress chapter 7 . 3/25/2008
Where does Takehiko come from anyway? I plan to finish this story today and get on the sequel.
| Spirit Tigress chapter 6 . 3/25/2008
Ignorance is bliss...as far as Takehiko is concerned anyway...
| Spirit Tigress chapter 5 . 3/25/2008
I really was beginning to wonder how all the swords fit, but it's manga!
Now I'm curious about the thousanth sword!
| Spirit Tigress chapter 4 . 3/25/2008
"Ren was confused. “That’s a disguise? I thought you were just into cosplay or somethin’. You can’t hide yourself from ninjas with THAT disguise!”
Takehiko sighs again. “Stupid, they’re not for you. They’re for ORDINARY people!”"~ Wow...
One of my friends would actually be dense enough to fall for the trace-binding-kiss jutsu
| Spirit Tigress chapter 3 . 3/25/2008
Nice...you actually do extensive research for your stories. I just research certain animals and weapons.
All I can say about Takehiko is...wow...random awesome samurai...
Don't let me get started on Ren: wondering if Yoshiro is good-looking?
| Spirit Tigress chapter 2 . 3/25/2008
"“This guys just probably posing as Takehiko to get his kicks.”
Suddenly, a flying kick came out of nowhere and knocks out the guard with the last comment. “WHO YOU CALLIN’ A POSER?” Takehiko shouted with his mouth wide open." ~ I love that!
Takehiko is really random!
I like how you have a fight at the start of a story and so well written too!
| Shang chapter 2 . 3/21/2008
Well, I see your ninja are quite inspiried by "Naruto"... this is why I prefer at least brief character descriptions, coz from the looks of it Ren does not have a mask while I pictured she had since her outfit distinguished her as a shinobi.
On a more positive note I like the fact that Takehiko has so many swords and possess different skills. I always enjoy it when the more important characters stand out in the crowd, being unique in one way or the other (hence why most of the heroes in my fantasy stories possess at least one trait that makes them 'special').
Overall this tale seems promising and I'll read some more of it in the nearest future. I'll cut the reading short for the time being, as it's pretty late though. Good luck with future chapters.
In the meantime, perhaps I could interest you in my own stories?
| Shang chapter 1 . 3/21/2008
I'm usually not to keen on samurai stories, but this seems promising. While I do feel slightly disappointed that the fight was brough down to a short description, I think Minoru (or Takehiko... not sure if you're using Japanese introduction system) can prove to be an interesting character and the number of his weapons gives hope for the battles to not become repetitive at one point.
And a ninja at the end? I like those XD
Overall: good job.