awwh, that's cute.

xL

I really have to say that this was one of the most refreshing one shots that I've ever had the pleasure of reading. It may be due partially to the fact that the protagonist sounds a lot like me, with her quirky sense of humor and need to run to a "friend" (notice the quotations) for advice, no matter how trivial the problem.

And, as a cherry on top, I loved the irony on every corner. Perfect one-shot, if I do say so myself.

That was great, really funny!

o.O I can't BELIEVE I haven't reviewed this yet! It's probably one of my favourite one-shots out there, and I love it into tiny atomic-sized bits. :) Besides, who *doesn't* love bathroom stall graffiti?

lol nice

I really enjoyed reading this, it's very well written and witty. Great job.

I really liked this and I thought the ending could of gone several different ways! It was written really well and made me giggle. :)

THAT WAS FREAKIN AWESOME!

Haha, nice. I like the love story twist, not the same old stuff you see in other stories, something more contemporary. And I like how it ends, considering niether of them felt the other was their type and all. I think that this would have been good for a longer tale. Maybe three or four chapters long so that there is a bit more tension in the waiting to see how it ends (for the readers & the main character)and seeing the main character develop the relationship with her mysterious penpal. I find Charlotte an interesting character even though she only makes brief appearances. Not quite sure why I like her, but she was an interesting choice for the go-to-friend of the main character.

Anyway, thanx for the review on my new story. I know I list things, but it is just my style. I love vivid imagery. I know its not everyone's cup of tea, but I appreciate the effort at some constructive criticism. As you get to know the characters better, there will be less description listing. Glad you like the story.

oh? this was interesting. there was a lot of british slang in this, which unfortunately I don't really understand. chuffed? and unisex toilets? like, whoa. we don't have those in the states.

there was this one paragraph about the coffee machine that was kind of weird, but otherwise this story flowed well - dialogue, the weird protaganist.. the ending was perfect, by the way! :D I loved the touch about throwing the marker at him.

hee, if I was nameless-female-lead, I would have added next to "She is also black," "You mean she WAS also black." 'Cos they're talking about a dead person, no? But that's just me. Good though, I liked "Because he kept bothering me, I would never think of a clever message to write and so, ultimately, I would never meet my one true love. The injustice of the world." Genius. XD

Oh God, I just love the ending so much. Especially that they didn't look like what they imagined each other to be.

There are times when I wonder how people can write such awesome one-shots...once again, I am in awe of you one-shot amazingness (shush, I make up words when I'm tired).

I loved this for several reasons. The protagonist was perfect. She was quirky, or maybe a little insane, and her obsessing and talking to Charlotte was spot on. I even enjoyed the fact that we *don't* know her name.

The writing wasn't stilted at all! It all flowed together properly and the individual rants and dialogue were well done.

The throwing of the marker at the guy's head was such a perfect addition! It really was.

“Want to go discuss the role of graffiti on politics during the 70’s sometime?” I asked.

That was an awesome line. It broke any tension that would be been there and was very in character.

Charlotte I liked in a way. She was necessary to highlight just how weird the scenario is to the protagonist.

The last few lines-the God was laughing ones-were the perfect ending. And you said you had problems ending chapters :P This was the perfect ending-but not too Mary Sue perfect because neither of them got the person they were expecting/usually attracted to.

I'm really rambly this morning...heh. Anyway it wasn't stilted at all, the only issue I had was a number of comma splices, and that's a fairly normal grammar problem.

*shrug* It was awesome. I liked. I'm glad you posted.

Danica

aw, i think it was really cute ) go you. its an interestign idea too, makes me think of that really cute video clip with the window and the pictures. and i love the fact that neither of them are each others types )

wow, i really enjoyed that. very clear and funny. great job. _

Hmm, I liked this a lot. Good work dude.