Reviews for My Mistake
BrokenHeart4Eva chapter 1 . 12/14/2006
thats right baroper some friendships are worth...i never thought i could trust anyone until i met you!
AlexdR chapter 1 . 5/30/2006
To sum up this poem, one could come simply say: "I am sad. My friends are mean." that seems good enough to me. Why the melodrama?
Baroper chapter 1 . 5/26/2006
Hey, Thanks for the advice. I really appreciate it! I'm only starting to realy get into posting my stuff and I'm happy to improve!
Faye Coon chapter 1 . 5/26/2006
To be honest I totally understand what your trying to say, and I feel you. I dislike the way you wrote the actual poem, the format is rather typical abd bland at best, but the effort is certainly apreciated! Coming from an experienced and veteran writer, I'd say that to improve on presentation, explore and research different styles of poetry. Be bold, have some long stanzas and some short ones, practice with choppy styles, and those that flow. Don't be afraid to write a poem wrong, you have no idea how many people are afraid to write a poem wrong! And seperate the term 'dark poetry' from 'Angsty writings' ok? Please get back to me, k? TTYL


KingdomRain chapter 1 . 5/26/2006
i love the begining and the end. all i can say is great poem. keep writing
Jessica Maxine chapter 1 . 5/26/2006
I feel like I have been in the same position.

"Believing I wasn't used./But then my heart was bruised./I hid my emotions away,/And promised never to pay/The price of friendship again."

I like this is so real. -JM