| Reviews for Love letters from California |
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   Mrdarcylover chapter 11 . 6/13/2006 I really liked this chapter, I hope you update soon! Liv |
| Slander By Osmosis chapter 10 . 6/12/2006 Yay! I was surprised to see that you had posted two chapters up in one day, but they were nicely written. Good job! Please update soon! - Lithely |
| Slander By Osmosis chapter 9 . 6/12/2006 Ooh! Two updates in one day. Splendid! You really are getting better at writing (in English) as the story progresses. Nice chapter! I'm off to review the next one. - Lithely |
| Lady of romance world88 chapter 10 . 6/12/2006 Hey! Wow! Poor Giada. I hope Giada and Jack end up together. I hope Jack will take care of Giada. Anyway i hope she will be friend with Jack. Hurry update soon. |
| scrtshdfgry chapter 10 . 6/12/2006 i like this...please continue! |
| Mrdarcylover chapter 10 . 6/12/2006 I really liked this chapter, I hope you update soon! |
| S Noelle Long chapter 10 . 6/12/2006 There were some more technical errors in this chapter, but it's not really important. Finally, there's a little bit happening here. I don't like when stories move too fast, either, in regards to romance because I don't feel it's true to life most of the time. So thank you for doing it right and building up the anticipation. I can't wait to read more. |
| S Noelle Long chapter 9 . 6/12/2006 "A big Audi A8 parked in front of hour house, and I went out." 'Hour' should be 'our.' "We'll be around fifteen people there." 'We'll' should be 'There will be.' "She put some lipstick." 'She put on some lipstick.' "I won't discuss about this now." It should either be 'I won't talk about this now,' or 'I won't discuss this now.' Ok, now that I'm done with that, it was a good chapter but I have some suggestions and questions. First, since they are all underage, why are the parents just sitting back and allowing the drinking? Also, it needs a bit more... detail, I guess. But it's good, you wrote of things that appeal to the senses and bring the reader into the story more. You made it relatable. Keep writing. |
| Lady of romance world88 chapter 8 . 6/7/2006 Hey! Poor Giada. I'm surprised that Peter stalked on her. If he love her, why does he write letters to her? Does Jake love her or just try help her? Hurry update soon. |
| Slander By Osmosis chapter 8 . 6/7/2006 Good two chapters. Keep updating as fast as you do! - Lithely |
| Mrdarcylover chapter 8 . 6/6/2006 This is really good, I hope you update soon! |
| Mailai chapter 8 . 6/6/2006 great story! i love it! never really read someone's work when they use signs instead of "... but its cool :D update soon won't ya? i'm loving jack... but i don't think i'll write any love letters any time soon x |
| StrawberryStarburst chapter 1 . 6/6/2006 Ok. I was reading your first chapter again. I know you're European so it's ok, but before I moved to England, I lived in California. There weren't much surfer fanatic girls where I lived (orange county)but there was one girl who surfed with blonde hair and blue eyes. Her name was Trista. I don't think there are mansions next to the beach, atleast not near where I lived. You are European though, so it's ok. :) |
| StrawberryStarburst chapter 8 . 6/6/2006 This is a really good story and I'm a bit surprised it doesn't have more reviews. Anyway,the ยป signs were a little hard to get used to but other than that, this is a really really great story! |
| wee-rebz chapter 8 . 6/6/2006 is very interesting the way this is going. i thot jack was interested in her earlier, but i think this is good, the way his feelings are being changed. think the way everything was solved with pete was a bit simplistic, but still, keep writing, the ideas are very good |