A bit choppy, but otherwise very nice!

"Oh underpants, it was Mel".

That made me laugh. Haha. UNDERPANTS. I am so easily entertained.

Anyway, I hope you update soon!

Pretty good so far. I liked the dialogue!

Funny, it's kinda like reading my diary lol and that was a great way to end the second chapter!

Whoa...this story is now one of my fav! Keep the good working! Update as soon as u can :)

I love your story. It caught my attention. I can't wait for the next chapter! _

i like it, but the only annoying thing was the whole Date and Place thing every single minute in the first chapter but at least you didnt do it in the second one.

other than that i think its really good. id love to read the next chapter and see where this goes.

~aa~

Not so much like my life anymore... hm

Hm... surprisingly seems like my life at times.

this is quite funny, and rather realistically. keep writing it! i'd suggest that you include some real substance in it (the deep crap... .) but i'm assuming that that comes later. hopefully alyssa will find sane, smart, nice friends. if they exist. : )

Quite good, kept me interested. I'm assuming by your style of writing that you've read "The Princess Diaries"? Because your style is very much alike. A good thing seeing as all the teen books seem to be written that way. My only critique is that I wish you made your "diary" entries longer. It's gets choppy when your skipping from one day to the next so quickly.

Your Humble Servant,~Dante