Defiant twists and turns.

very, very good. some minor grammer mistakes but nothing most wouldn't over look

interesting twists and turns.

Very interesting. Sounds very realistic.

Very impressive.

i loved it. emotional. simplistic. conveyance of truth. conclusion: great story.

PW

That is so very very sad...next ime can you try for a happy ending?

...wow... That...is a good epilogue. Given up on everything. SAD! Anyway, great end to a great story.

Took a twist at the end :P. The whole "exchange" thing made it seem like it was leading to a diffrent ending :P. But yup :P. Grood story.

M... deliciousness

O.O I'm near tears! Well, technically, no. But I was when I first read it. Still counts. Wow... sad ending. But, you know, I guess that's the only ending. . UNLESS you were to add a magical fairy godmother. Then she could have lived! But no, sadly, there was no fairy. No magic at all. None. Ok, I'm ranting on about nothing. It was a GREAT story! Really great. REALLY. I enjoyed every minute of reading it. So sentimental and then there's the cruel irony. Ok. That's ok then. So... does Jonathan stay with his parents still?

It's a little short, and it jumped to her death to quickly I think... I would advise you to write a 9nth. But besides the ending, I liked it. Good job.

Emo and delicious

I should threaten you...but I'm a bit too sad abotu that ending to do any such thing. I'm hopig for another chapter...maybe an epilogue...something...you can't end it like this...I won't let you...it's not fair...

Aw...that was really abrupt..but well..I guess there couldn't really have been a happy ending..there is no cure for AIDS..sigh..I don't think there's a need for a 9th chapter..I mean what more would you say? Great story, even though it didn't have a happy ending.