|Reviews for Evolution|
| shortwinters219 chapter 14 . 3/22/2015
I love that you give your readers a snippet of Ben's POV through the journal entries and his entry for this chapter is fucking GOLD!
HE FUCKING LIKES PAGE!
(Please tell me if I'm wrong in my interpretation of the journal entry because I might be blinded with my obsessive search for Ben's act of love for Page)
| shortwinters219 chapter 7 . 3/21/2015
finally a moment when they're not ripping at each other's throats!
| Myst Marshall chapter 25 . 3/16/2015
You should update quickly this time, I really wanna know what happens. I hope they get together soon, because quite frankly I'm sure they're tired of fighting it! xD Please continue and not make us wait 10 months. :)
| Guest chapter 7 . 3/15/2015
I read this& it was my favourite chapter thus far.;3 I like Ben the cuddler. :3
| Megsi chapter 25 . 3/15/2015
Yay you updated!
I really liked this chapter, the Ben and Page moments were super cute, it's amazing how much their relationship has progressed!
I think her moments with her father are really special, and are really helping her grow up and try to forgive herself for avoiding her father, and come to terms with her life, as it is, and her future.
For some reason I thought the hug when they finished playing paintball was magical. Especially when she said they make a great 'survival team' and he looks at her all softly and agrees. I feel like that term, 'survival team', is just really them to a T, like their relationship dynamic, and it felt like a really great moment when she said that.
| Daniaisme chapter 5 . 3/14/2015
The tornado represents grief. She knows her father's death is approaching, she knows there's nothing she can do to prevent it and its accompanying pain...no matter what she says everyone will get hurt. He will die. At least that's my interpretation. ;) can't wait to find about bens home life. I hope it's real traumatic like he has an abusive dad...I mean for realisms sake not because im a sadist or anything cuz I'm totally not- ok I'll stop now. I like how two bizarre teens are forced to hang with each other. I hope our main character grows the fuck up and fast and accepts help for her anxiety real soon so they can have babies and such. Good story bro. :3 sorry for the rant...
| Kat chapter 25 . 3/14/2015
I heart you lots! And this was such a cute chapter! I like how things are finally straightening out a little between Ben and Page. It's such a big step to be thinking about college! Especially because of a boy! Scary. I love the zombie paintball, btw. We totally need to do that sometime! I miss you so much!
| Lock Ells chapter 24 . 10/17/2014
I just really love this. I only just found it and now I need more. No pressure, but I can't wait for the next chapter.
| Phoenixian Niwa chapter 24 . 9/29/2014
I stayed awake all last night reading your story, went to school, then came back to finish it. This is awesome! I am emotionally attached to this story.
| LovelySesshy chapter 24 . 6/29/2014
Yey, I could finally log in with my fanfiction account here _ Next Review will be with an acutal account then :)
| LovelySesshy chapter 24 . 6/26/2014
I can't tell you how much I love this story! It's great cause you turn things in another, unexpected way.
Instead of cliché like letting Page (I love her full name xD) date that Andrew, she stays true to her feelings and she doesn't act like a complete bitch just because Ben is an ass. I also like the fact she aknowledges her jealousy but I hope she does think about the fact he slept with so many girls at least once. But I guess that comes around if they ever get lovey dovey _
The backround story of them is really interesting and I think it's wonderful that you focus the story not only on the romance part but also on the emotional issues they have...i can't really express what I mean, to be honest, but I love the way you describe how both of them deal with their tragedies. I honestly want Ben to kiss her already cause she already likes him...but she knows he tried to kiss her once. Maybe she's just running away again but I hope she can turn around and face Ben someday.
I also have to compliment you for your characters! They are believable and I can feel with them. I especially like her best friends, the Brother, his finacé and the guidance teacher :D Andrew...i'm not sure. I don't really get him.
Btw why did Ben help Andrew to get a date with Page? It was way earlier but i still think about it - could be i simply overread it...
I hope they can make progress!
Sorry the review is so short but I'll try to comment regulary -
Can't wait for more!
| That Beach Girl chapter 24 . 5/25/2014
I am eagerly awaiting your next update. I really like how you show every aspect of Page's life instead of focusing solely on the romance. You kind of show how everything links together and piles up on top of everything else. I love your characters. They're beautifully flawed. And I'm kind of glad that Nicole slapped Ben. I mean, I feel bad for him and all, but he was being an ass and treating girls like they're disposable in a big no-no in my books. And all your characters have a maturity and intelligence that is really rare in books, particularly ones about kids in high school.
And the giraffe dream was golden.
Keep up the stellar work! And please post soon.
| That Beach Girl chapter 22 . 5/25/2014
I'm that guest reviewer that forgot to leave her name before, the one rambling about the beach. I just want to tell you how much I love your story again. I laughed and cried- only really, really good stories can do that, in my opinion. Seriously, you're ripping my heart out here, in the best possible way. I think you have a very powerful story here. It's so real and honest. Whenever a character does anything, realistic consequences follow, unlike in a lot of stories I've read. You're really quite refreshing. You see, I'm very picky about what I read, probably because I've lived through a lot of traumatic crap and have a love for psychology myself, which results in me thinking way, way more than most people. I even read your author's notes! Your writing makes me feel like I'm not alone, like I'm with a friend. It's a delightful feeling. I honestly have nothing to criticize, which is very unlike me.
PS Since you love psychology and sound as nerdy as I am, I'm making a book suggestion for you: Without Conscience by Dr. Robert Hare. I think you'd find it fascinating, if you haven't already read it. It's on psychopathology. Now I'm going to read the rest of what you've posted. :)
| Guest chapter 8 . 5/24/2014
Just here to say I'm enjoying your story. I love your description of the beach. Reminds of of the beach near where I live: all pointy rocks that make you wish you have invulnerable Hobbit feet and empty crab shells that the seagulls probably ate the insides of and clumps of nasty smelling seaweed. Not so bad once the tide goes down and you can walk on the cool, damp sand... Anyway, I'm rambling. I also enjoyed Page's description of her school- her descriptions of anything, really, because being in her head is just so interesting. Really, I love her character. Especially when she starts mouthing off to people who kinda deserve it. Ben is growing on me too- at first I just wanted to give him a good, hard slap because he kinda deserved it but then he's got those moments where he softens up a bit.
And the journal entries make me laugh. They're fantastic. You manage to take serious subjects and present them in a way that people like me who have really dark senses of humour can laugh at them while still keeping the seriousnesss of it.
And I rather like the brother's girlfriend. In fact, your characters are well-drawn, in my opinion. Keep it up!
| OnePromise chapter 24 . 5/24/2014
Yes! Craziness is good! That means entertainment and I do love to be entertained! This story is fantastic and I'm so excited to see where you take it! And I don't think Page's attachment to Ben is unhealthy at all! I think it's perfect ; ) Can't wait for the next chapter! :D