This story has a greal deal of potential. If you could try to expand it from 24k into about 35k you could add more details and create a better version of this story. The idea is great just the execution needs work. It was a pleasure to read your story here. :)

I love your story!so adorable! XD

really enjoyed it

aw! great.

manda :)

I read your A/N, but was unable to open the link supplied for the rewritten version of your story. So, I decided to read this version.

It has an extreme amount of potential, and I like it more because I'm not reading about Vampires/Werewolves. It's nice to read about other supernatural beings. And, although my own story contains the latter, it's centered more around a Fallen Angel.

Our Fallens are different, and that's interesting. I like Aidyn, but I so far don't care too much for Rae. She's impulsive, though if she weren't we might not have gotten this far in your tale.

I'll agree with you on the rewriting, as your chapter did contain a lot of 'holes' that would be nicer if filled in. Other than being a little thin on descriptions, I really like the concept of your story.

I will continue to read it. Good job!

I LOVE THE STORY!

love it loved it -

ok lol

Wow... your story is pretty good and I really mean it. Although I thought that your story was a bit short at times and it was missing something, it was still hell of a lot better than most fictionpress stories that I've read. I enjoyed reading your vocabulary, the character's growth and behavior, and your plot. Awesome job and I hope to read more of your stories soon.

I just read through your story.

And I have to agree with all the other reviewers - its realy good.

But some critisism from me: You first chapters were much better then the later ones. The characters develop some strange behavior, like when Raelyn was so depresse she couldnt remember Isaak, althoug the picture of Aidyn shielding her with his wings was beautyfull :)

The later chapters seemed, like you have done them in a hurry just to get finished.

I realy enjoyed reading it, keep on writing!

awesome story and a great ending.C.P.

It was a good story. It ended different that I exspected it too, but it was good.

-Crimson Ara

i really don't get why you don't like this! this is amazing

I just made a joyful squeeking sound... So I suppose that means this chapter was utterly fantastic, therefore leading me to conclude that you should update! *nods*

I love this story!

OMG this story was hot i love it so much it's sweet as it is so going on my fav list without a doubt. i cried it was so sweet.