Reviews for Each Step
Ryan Schiff chapter 1 . 6/28/2006
This is the trick to poetry. Don't tell us how you feel. Show us what feelings look like. You say "Its getting harder and harder to follow the rules."

I say:The entropyIn side of meGrows with every strideRiding waves of chaosPulled out by pandamoniums tideEvery moment, harder to get off the ride
Pandakun84 chapter 1 . 6/25/2006
Cool. Nice job on this.
Tikklz chapter 1 . 6/12/2006
I agree that this is very "simple and effective". It just says what it means to, without trying too hard. Nice.
Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 6/7/2006
Interesting. Well written. Keep it up.

elvenstorm chapter 1 . 6/7/2006
This is so simple yet effective. Don't know what else to say, this was brilliant. Well done x
whatshername665 chapter 1 . 6/7/2006
Hmm sounds like you are trying to stretch your wings and possibly find your self? Great peom!