Reviews for Mouthful |
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![]() ![]() ![]() i love this one. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well! This poem though short carries a sort of potent meaning to it. Especially the last part: Your words like cheap champagne. Leave a bitter taste in my mouth. It leaves me wondering what exactly you meant by those words. |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow, i really like this. is short but i think if it was longer it wouldnt say as much...i know that sounds odd, but maybe you get what i mean... |
![]() ![]() ![]() i liked your usage of, as my old teacher called them, "big words" |
![]() ![]() ![]() You have certainly not failed in getting across the emotion which is the core to this piece, yet the incompleteness of sentences and the imperfection of structure seem to hinder me from getting the most out of it. Unless, of course, it was your purpose to deliberately make this poem as it reads now. |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow, this is awesome! keep writing! Kyonkichi |
![]() ![]() ![]() This poem may be short but it has a certain directness that I like about it and you can really feel its impact once you read it. Nice one. |