|Reviews for stringing desert charms|
| chaos called creation chapter 1 . 6/18/2006
makes me think of vodka, sun, and sweat.
oh, and passionate love declarations of course.
isn't it sad how everyone builds up summer to the point that it's almost as if it's a castle in the sky and in the awesomnesity of it all it will pull everyone out of this exam funk while in reality the heat is settling into us practically like a second skin and going outside without the comfort of ac is bloody impossible?
I'm just not feeling it.
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 6/15/2006
Wow, I love the tone of this. I especially like the lines "slur my speech with syllables I've yet to comprehend" and "back in burning bright daylight drought." Just the words in those two lines are wonderful. I enjoy alliteration, so yeah, definitely my fave lines. Keep writing! :)
| Aimee Raven chapter 1 . 6/10/2006
This is so sad and so angry! Some really unique imagery though...I just wrote a poem that's partially related to the desert, lol, but in a different way...this is remarkable! Good job! Love, Mia
| amaya dwyn chapter 1 . 6/8/2006
that is so beautiful. Every word you put down helps you articulate your ideas better than the one before it. I love the form (of lack of) that you use, the feeling just moves freely through. Excellent