|Reviews for The Smallest Elephant|
| Mandy S. Bryan chapter 14 . 2/27
This would have been added to my favorites list but the ending sucks and if i had known that this was such a tragedy i would have never read it. Your writing was great the characters real but the end just ruined it for me.
| Greenpanda0u0 chapter 25 . 2/10
FUCK ME OH MY GOD FUCKING FEELS! PLEASE CONSIDER PUTTING A ONE SHOT WHERE KEEGAN'S DEAD BUT ALL THE OTHER CHARACTERS REFLECT AND FEEL SAD AND FIND HIS BODY AND FIND HIS STORY AND THE ENGLISH TEACHER GETS FIRED AND SKEEZIE REGRETS AND NEHEMIAH REGRETS AND EVERYONE REGRETS AND yeah... Thanks for this story! It was well written and I really loved it! I hope you'll write more stories but I just checked and the last time you updated was like two years ago but if you end up reading this good luck in life! HAVE A GREAT DAY
| totaltezz chapter 25 . 10/19/2013
WOW SHIT I FUCKING HATE THIS STORY JESUS CHRIST
I DONT ACTUALLY
THIS STORY IS GREAT
SO MANY FEELS
SHIT SHIT SHIT
| Ibbit chapter 15 . 10/19/2013
I forgot to mention that I loved what you did with the sex scene. I've never seen it done that way and I think it was a great way to have it done.
continue on your way.
| Ibbit chapter 25 . 10/18/2013
Not particularly fond of this one, person. From the beginning, I just wanted him to be with Skyler. And for someone to call him Skyler. Skeezie is a terrible thing to call the person youre dating. But they loved too quickly, too much, without thought. And miah had no real self control on how he was with Keegan. Or how anything he did affected Keegan. Whatever your secret about him was, I never caught it. Kills me how awful everyone treated Keegan, even the teachers. Stuff like that in the real world could end in firing or etc. Bullying is not a joke, especially in situations like that. Yes, I realize its a story. And a fairly good one, but still upsets me some.
from that, I've pretty much listed some of the less than good things. Too accepting people, too mood-swingy people, too few sympathetic people. It seemed like everything that could go wrong for Keegan, did. And does no one care that these kids are being abused, going anorexic, or using drugs, alcohol, and sexing? Geez, parental/authority figures.
Overall, not my favorite of yours that I read, but it is still good. I really liked the story within the story. I thought that was the best part, and kinda the best writing in the story. I'll leave you with this long review.
keep it up, if the heavy burden of a muse comes upon you.
| WidowBird chapter 25 . 9/13/2013
Crying right now :( An awful yet wonderful story you've created! I understand why you made the end as you did but I still don't like it :/
Hugs and thanks for sharing this :) Hope to read something new from you soon :) or maybe read the continuation of brainless :D would really really like to do that! :)
| Kitty Holiday chapter 25 . 7/27/2013
Ok, the story hurts like hell, and I know it was supposed to end like that. However, I was hoping that you coudl write an aftermath story. I want to know how nehemiah and skeezie handle the mess they made and how everyone copes with his death. And how did the teacher find the final chapter anyway? Sorry about the yammering, but would you consider it?
| TO-OLazyToLogin chapter 25 . 2/11/2013
You should do another story following what happens next. That was quite chilling...
| TO-OLazyToLogin chapter 13 . 2/10/2013
Grrr. NO. SKEZZIE SHOULD BE WITH HIM.
| GrangerDanger333 chapter 25 . 1/27/2013
I just recently read the whole of this and its brilliant! I feel as though maybe I saw this ending coming from a bit over halfway through, I just couldn't see a happy ending, or any sort of ending that the character would be happy with, nothing was getting solved, it just kept getting worse (worse for him I mean). So yeah, I think this kind of fits as an ending even though it's SAD! And ohmygosh the elephant! I somehow found the elephant more lovely than Keegan himself. I actually think its a really clever idea, him writing a story, and us seeing it. It was just a huge metaphor but it was really great and worked really well with the rest of the story. Poor Skeezie though. Keegan was so horrible to him really.
But yeah, AMAZING story! :D So sad. I kind of had a horrible feeling of dread through the last five-ten chapters where I sort of thought I could see this was not going to end well :(
| Miqnon chapter 6 . 9/24/2012
HE CRIED YOU FUCKING IDIOT
| Guest chapter 25 . 9/17/2012
Oh my god. Holy shit. Saddest most brilliant fucking thing ever.
I don't think that I have ever had this intense of a reaction to a story. A fictional story.
Everything was just so heart wrenching and beautifully written. I loved every aspect of the story, and the story within the story.
And my god. I'm still crying and can't get my words out properly.
So I'll just leave this here with a thank you for sharing such an incredible story.
Ps. I would love to know how Skeezie and Nehemia react to Keegan's suicide. I'm a sucker for angst.
| wallawallabingbang chapter 25 . 8/27/2012
not to be rude but that ending sucked
you should give warn in the summary that its an unhappy ending
| Cookiemonster47 chapter 24 . 8/12/2012
Does keegan really kill himself...i mean i know i just dont want to belive it what a tragic story:/ oh well hope you keep writing other stories...
| Cookiemonster47 chapter 25 . 8/12/2012