Reviews for The Smallest Elephant
Orangeena chapter 6 . 7/1/2006
Okay, so I just began this story- it's really great. Keegan reminds me of somebody I used to be very close to." looked like he had spilled little drops of water near the end of the short chapter." -Not too quick on the uptake, though is he? , I'm really glad I found this story and since you are now in my Author Alerts, I can't wait for an update.-Abbey
living-out-a-sacrifice chapter 6 . 7/1/2006
Well, I'm glad that I can honestly say that I like your story too! I love Keegan. He's very real, and that's probably my favorite thing. And Nehemiah (kind of a hard character to read, huh?)! Everyone should have green hair, as far as I'm concerned. I liked the drama in the last chapter, and how Keegan builds everything up in his head. Good job.
Ad Hector chapter 4 . 6/26/2006
Done. I guess this should be the part in which I ask: Please update soon!
Ad Hector chapter 3 . 6/26/2006
You write very naturally. Even if you write short chapters they're pretty fast-paced. I'm just getting more in love with it each time. I hope you're not thinking I'm over-patronizing. But it really has been a while since I've read something this good that got me affected.
Ad Hector chapter 2 . 6/26/2006
OMG! This is really special. The chapter is unusual but what's more unusual is that it worked on me. Hehehe. I love it I love it I love it. The people around me are looking oddly at me now for giggling in my seat. )
Ad Hector chapter 1 . 6/26/2006
Great first chapter. I love your main character Keegan. He's so painfully genuine. I'm glad I finally get to read something refreshing here on FP. Just my taste. It would be foolish not to read on. So I will...
Iamausername chapter 4 . 6/24/2006
I haven't been on the net for awhile so I got to read two chappies at once yay! :)I don't think I've aw-ed so much in one chapter. The cuddly thing at the end was cuteness x1239574329. And poor Keegan seems to be going through a lot. Luckily he has Nehemiah there to cuddle him to happiness! Awesome chapter _ BTW you have great taste in music ~_
Porn Yesterday chapter 4 . 6/24/2006
Interesting story as of yet... I like Keegan.

It has a touch of reality alongside a poignant truth... sad even. Sorry if I don't make any sense.

The relationship dynamics are amusing though, the growth is well also and I'm glad you're not rushing into the slash... it would be too fast and disappoint me. I s'pose.

On a whole though, it is well written, no constructive criticism on my part... maybe next time?

But as it is, good story you've got here - it keeps me wanting more.

Keep it up though, and keep doing that good thing you do.


Your Friendly Neighbourhood Dead Bisexual

Look, it's a dead body...!

It's a girl...

Let's poke her boobs!

Morbid, am I not?
Jayn chapter 4 . 6/24/2006
I like the story. His friends are cool, even though they do stuff I wouldn't. Please update!
bail chapter 4 . 6/24/2006
Awesome story. I really like it! More soon?
Esquirella chapter 2 . 6/15/2006
I guess it will take Keegan a bit of time to get used to hanging out with friends now that he's in public school. The Doritos breath cracked me up!
Iamausername chapter 2 . 6/15/2006
Aw great start so far! I'm definitely loving Keegan! And Nehemiah of course! Can't wait to read more :)
ShadowGal chapter 1 . 6/13/2006
KOOK? That's just cruel. Oh, Keegan's parents, why would you -do- such a thing... (I would do something like that to my kid, actually, if I had one.) I've seen worse initials, though. A family friend of mine recently married a guy whose initials are K. And we live in the south, and they have several black friends, so... Needless to say, his initials were not to be found anywhere on the invitations, etc. *laughs*

Given Keegan's body stats, he's going to be officially underweight (according to my kinesiology/health book, which I have out to do evil homework) if he loses -any- weight at all. So, yeah. Definitely see the anorexia signs already.

Interesting start to the story! I hope that Keegan gets a boost of confidence, 'cause right now I feel bad just reading about the poor little mousey kid. I mean, his stress/shyness is actually stressing -me- out a bit. Aww.

I'll look forward to the next update. Keep up the nice work!
Esquirella chapter 1 . 6/13/2006
A very promising start!
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