Reviews for Janie and the Cretin |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Why do you keep spelling Johnny's name wrong. You spell it Jhonny. Besides that and a lot of grammar/spelling errors and leaving words out it's a great story. Please don't be mad it's just some constructive criticism. |
![]() ![]() ![]() they will have beatiful children together. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hell yes, interaction is on its way. i like it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() how come she doesnt get that her cretin wants her back? i want more interatcion between them! |
![]() ![]() ![]() well, ive heard that UCLA is supposed to be good so im saying why not, and it is across the entire country from mike so i know why she wants to go there, i would to... |
![]() ![]() ![]() hehe, he was a little monster, and now hes a hot man, you need to describe him in his 20 year old glory! |
![]() ![]() ![]() yes, hes back. and its a three way romance, and make waants her, and maybe gavin too, oh this is going to be great! |
![]() ![]() ![]() trip down memorial lane. nice. i think that janie need another man and mike needs some competition... |
![]() ![]() ![]() jesus, thats hilarious, i want that mean when i was a child, but they seem to enjoy themselves. im looking forward to see the interaction between janie and her cretin in the next chaapter, or maybe the lack of it if janie has her way... |
![]() ![]() ![]() shit, shes only 14 and the teletubby is singling her out, damn. but seriously, to name a person lala, talk about zero imagination. im guessing next chapter will be bad, as in janie will be thorn to pieces... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wonderful story! Can't wait to check out all your other ones! |
![]() ![]() ![]() very nice fic. thank you very much! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() hilarious! i love nat and jhonny, they are adorable! I couldnt stop reading but I think the epilogue was unnecessary, if anything, it kinda ruined the story for me. I always thought the point of an epilogue was for closure, to close up any loose ends, and so on. I though the story would have been just fine if you had ended at chapter 20. Well, I was a little curious as to why it would have taken them 3 years, after all, they do live next to each other and im sure Mike comes home all the time. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is the first time anyone has disci[lined Nat and Johnny, if i were them i owuld have gotten a butt load of spankings, lol. but i guess diff. ppl have diff. ways of discipline. anyways, the last part of this chapter, was so sweet. i was "aw" ] |
![]() ![]() ![]() AW, he was sleeping with her diary in his hand :) How sweet. Janie is so mean, and she hurt his felings, i feel bad for Mike :( |