Again, I am amazed by this story. I can't get enough. I was beginning to wonder if her stalker wasn't someone in the band because of her popularity and their lack of. Interesting twist. I could definitely "feel" the tension of the men as they were having their argument! Great job!

xoxo

jennie

PS: I majored in Secondary English Edu! I teach 8th grade Language Arts now! Fun times!

yes! love it! I was a nerdy band kid too and I just love it! Off to read more!

xoxo

jennie

So... I just found you over here and I love this story so far! I am going to be reading and reviewing throughout but I just wanted to let you know that this chapter totally hooked me in! Can't wait!

xoxo

jennie

I really liked chapther fourteen because it showed that Sara is just a regular person. She also loves her sister like a big sister would. It really added depth to her character

And now you have changed one of the main characters name from Ryan Cage to Ryan Chase abruptly. Consistancy in a story is important.

I have to ask...why do you keep changing her eye color? You should really keep consistancy.

a good start

Good story, I really liked the characters and their relationship! But your story needs some serious editing, the characters' names (parents, brother) often switch from the one we know to a completely different one, the characters' descriptions (like Sara's eyes for example) or the fact that Ryan's referred to as an only child at the end, when he had disappeared at one of the story's most important moment because his sister had just given birth to his first niece! I just think that with some editing your story would be even better!

Anyway just keep up with writing and maybe get a beta reader!

good ending, I liked the story. Sorry about the prior review, some people lately have been assuming things, and it really pisses me off.

hey i'm insulted at your authors note. (who's 22 and a virgin? me and several of my friends!)

i love the story so far, but i just noticed something. when sara first comes home her dad's name is nick but just now as shes helping her dad clean up the kitchen his name is steve.

I like this a lot. I've got one question. Any specific songs or artists your listened to while writing this? I know when I write stories that involve music I had one play list on my iTunes that I listen to. love it.

This is much better than other stories I've seen on this website.

I searched "fiction forum" because I felt bored and am very happy that I've stumbled across your story. It's a nice break from quantum mechanics.

Looking forward to reading the next few chapters!

Alright, now I'm really interested. Though I have to say, Sara sounded a little defensive when he told her his feelings. She should've been happy and she shouldn't have waved the college thing in his face. I'm thinking she's a bitch right about now. Anywho, great job. This is a fave.

This was a great story. It would have been better to know more of Ryan and Sara relationship before Liberty.