Reviews for New Girl
t chapter 4 . 2/6
Really not what I was hoping for. Just four chapters of abuse. Im not usually one to give up on a story but I just can't read this anymore. You seem like a descent writer just wish your storyline was better/different?
Reira chapter 48 . 12/11/2013
Yes, it would have been better if you ended it in the stadium confession; that way, it wouldn't be so hard to accept that this piece you wrote here is done, finished, and will never be continued. I'd be completely honest; this story is not one of the best here in fictionpress but its not that horrible. I gotta say it was pretty interesting, disappointing at times, confusing, amusing and entertaining at the same time that it had me reading all 47 chapters in one go. I don't know, but I just love your characters here. I find myself imagining how they would look in real life and all that stuff and I was like what the hell am I doing?

I love Wit; I wish she had more character development here. Would love to know how things will end up with her and Mandy. I mean that last line in Chapter 47 really had me 'Oh man this is gonna be epic; Mandy x Wit fuck yeah!' Then I had to read your last note.. /facepalm I didn't really like the Wit x Lindsey pairing, neither Mandy x Lindsey. I just want Linds to stay with Jackie, but then again Jackie x Wit wouldn't so bad either. Haha but yea it would have been lovely if there was at least a chapter about Mandy and Wit. T_T

Anyway, it really saddens me that this has come to a disappointing end.. but if you feel writing again, please do so. You have a talent. Don't let it go to waste. :) And wherever you are right now, I hope you'll find your way back here someday. :)

Good luck with your endeavors missy. :3
spezria26 chapter 11 . 5/19/2013
Did I like it? Ahh! Firstly, I know that you decided to end this story unfinished but Im still gonna review. Anyways, I absolutely adored this so far! The empty thing is so powerful and how she identifies. This whole time I've been reading this story and like, "I like this Lindsey kid" and i couldn't figure out why I liked her. I usually like the funny, bitchy characters as long as they show some sign of a heart or have a reason why they're so damaged but she didn't have one. She raped somebody, she molests people, she fucks with people's minds. She was sick before, and she still is, but now your starting to explain why she's so messed up. I adore your writing. Also, love the love-hate relationship between them. It's thrilling, erotic, and completely lovable in a very hatable way.
Guest chapter 48 . 3/15/2013
Please continue pleease :(
Raiza chapter 48 . 3/13/2013
Why dont u just write a freaking end? just a fucking chapter :(
Sara chapter 13 . 3/4/2013
I'm sorry but...this really dissapointed me. You're a wonderful writer and the story is great, it's just that Jackie acts almost nothing like a rape victim; which is what she seems to be based on your description. Trudy behaves more like one but Jackie just doesn't. It makes the story much less real and very unbelievable. I tried hard to give it the benefit of the doubt but I couldn't finish this chapter. I'm sorry.
helasha8 chapter 48 . 3/4/2013
Hey just read this andd enjoy. Bit sad about the ending but oh well. Just wondering if you still write?
Sour-Chan chapter 48 . 10/27/2012
Man, my comp died forever ago and it took me forever to remember the name of this story since I lost all my book marks. Sad to see the story end but re-reading and getting to read al you did have up was a blast. One of my top fav stories for sure. Hope to see some writing of yours again someday even if it's a new story. :)
breakthehabit chapter 1 . 8/31/2012
Yo! So I read your story over the summer, I had no net [saved it on a usb] and I thought you might like a review, though it's mostly commentary. Here it is!

Chapter 2: Lmfao. o_O Poor Jackie. :S I really like the story so far. :D Different than most
Chapter 11: I'm extremely frustrated with the events going on in the story. I mean, Jackie just got like flippin raped. And she's not calling the cops, telling her sister, she's not doing anything. Not realistic at all if you ask me. -wants to kill Lindsey-
Chapter 21: Yup. Still ticked off. People are so stupid.
Chapter 26: Yay! Kinda happy ending. I wonder what's going to happen next. If Lindsey will be nice and sweet to Jackie and if she'll stop forcing herself on Jackie. I really don't get it. -_- The characters in this story are kind of messed up and I don't get how Jackie isn't scarred forever from Lindsey forcing herself on her all the time. But oh well.. good-ish story, bad characters. Mandy, Kyle, Eugene and the rest of the Jackie's family [not counting her] seem like the only "real" characters. Trudy too. and the Gym teacher. The rest are.. unrealistic, if I may.
Chapter 27: LOL. I thought Wit was a guy. [Read ending of Chapter 47]
Chapter 28: Yay! Finally. A non-raped sexual scene between the two main characters. :d
Chapter 31: Yup. Better. Much better.
Chapter 34: Btw, none of the "intimate" scenes you wrote so far have turned me on. :P
Chapter 35: Wowz. At this chapter I realized that there was almost nothing about school for awhile. :O
Chapter 38: Yikes. I actually like Wit, kinda.
Chapter 41: Writing style? Excellent. Story, dissected? Kinda.. horrible.. Story, overall? Decent. My opinion. :S
Chapter 47: I still want to continue reading this story tho. :) Mandy and Wit is definitely not something to miss.
Acect98 chapter 47 . 8/6/2012
Love this story very much! Best story i read in my life!
A2463 chapter 1 . 8/6/2012
Love this story very much!
A2463 chapter 48 . 8/6/2012
Best story i ever read!
ForTheLoveOfApples chapter 48 . 7/19/2012
I'm sorry. But this made me flip over a table in frustration. It was a great story though, I loved it! T-T
Guest101 chapter 47 . 7/15/2012
I just found this a few days ago. Someone mentioned it on a website so i thought why not check it out? i CANNOT believe i just found this! gahhh and my mouth dropped at the ending.. lol it was nice though.. even though you're not gonna update it anymore.. this is gotta be the best book ive read so far.. it had everything i imagined.. i got some sick fantasies... lol :P
Guest chapter 1 . 6/29/2012
Good erotic stuff.
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