Reviews for The Day It Rained Forever
miscellanea chapter 1 . 4/10/2008
Good one
Translucently Opaque chapter 1 . 12/10/2006
On the day it rained forever... I really like that...
heroin zombie chapter 1 . 6/16/2006
This should be a stanza in a longer poem. Too short. P

Though, it is concise. That one comma is very strategically placed, and the "skin/sin" rhyme saves it from losing rhythm. Each of these little stylistic supports are very well-placed, which allows it stand on its own. But I still think this could be transplanted into a larger piece.