Reviews for Locker Buddies |
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![]() ![]() ![]() hm. she knows jeff intimately also? like more then acquatince? and such? |
![]() ![]() ![]() hahaha so cool... but hurry up and UPDATE UPSATE UPDATE! |
![]() ![]() ![]() ha i like ur story...interesting...u should make ur chapters longer...but still very good...UPDATE! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I felt the same way as Jeff: "that's it?" LOL. But I can understand Michelle, being a cynic myself and all. So is art going to mimic life or life art? I am intrigued. Do update again soon, yes? Yes. :) |
![]() ![]() Ha! i like that story... altho, when michelle is trying out for the part in the play, i think she should be a bit more reluctant to try out for the part. i dont know...just maybe... |
![]() ![]() ![]() brilliant! update soon |
![]() ![]() Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice story. I wonder, will her live imitate art? well, keep it up and update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It seems like a pretty good story so far. I like your characters. Yes, a little cliched, but c'mon, what ISN'T at least slightly based on a cliche on this site? And I think you're doing a great job. Small constructive crit, but it does bug me a little when you're in 1st person ('I thought yada-yada') and then you suddenly switch to 3rd ('He was startled blah-blah') and back to 1st again. But then again, that's just the grammar freak in me :) I hope you have fun on your trip! Update as soon as you get back! |
![]() ![]() ![]() gREAT pLESE UPDATE! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmm, cliche stories aren't always that bad, I find most highly amusing. Update soon, please! sl |
![]() ![]() ![]() cute chapter. Keep writing this story is different and very interesting! Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() interesting |
![]() ![]() I think sticking to the cliche can be preferable to cliches with plot twists because the entire story would have been leading you in a direction you've become comfortable with, only for them to be yanked into another path. It can be extremely confusing rather than helpful at times. But that's just my (unnecessary) opinion. |
![]() ![]() Update soon! |