jeez every time i go to read a chapter of this story, I dread the end. I'm so glad you've updated. Please, do write more soon!

-Sa x33

Hey!

School writer's block is one hell of a combo! I've had that too... *sigh* Good thing you managed to write. )

I think Jade could have left a certain detail out when she broke up with Markus, but it was interesting to see a more emotional side of it. And if Lana doesn't want Antony to see the bruise, she better cover it up with some make-up. Annie is adorable! )

yay! a new chappie. it was cute, and very nice at the end when Antony calls. It's totally sweet.

ah poor markus, this was a sad but really good chapter. keep up the good work!

Now, I am even more disgusted with Jade. I do not care how she looked when she said it. She should never have done that.

Another thing. Anthony called over THAT? That was a little weird.

Anyway, funny as usual, and now I am busy myself, so adios.

YAY! You updated! D D D

Poor Marcus... *cries* That so sucks for him... Will he fall in love with somebody else? Because I hate sad endings, so I think I would cry for real (I doubt it, but who knows?) if he didn't.

And I luff how Antony gets all protective over Lana. He's the man. )

dog bites huh? i feel your pain.

anyways, great chapter.

maybe more action next time?

more romance? possibly? heehee

i'm loving it all though

and im finding it hard to write myself atm...meh.

Great Update! I love that Lana has such a great relashonship with both Markus and Antony. I still say it should be Lana and Antony all the way. UPDATE SOON!

Excellent! I've missed these characters so much! I cannot tell you how excited I was when I saw that you had updated. Great new chapter. Poor Marcus. I would have hugged him for as long as possible too. Can't wait to read the next chapter. However, I'll admit, I miss Antony.

xD

“Jade. One. Markus. Annie. Yell. Hurt. Apologize. Ice. Hug. Left.”

Made me laugh so hard I fell off my chair... .

Funny yet somewhat touching chapter. Hope you update soon!

aww. awesome chapter. i loved it. and it flowed perfectly. the markus scene was so heartbreaking. sniff. good ol' lana. i would've hugged him too :) good to see you back with this. i can't wait for more!

I will finish this tomorrow, but this is my general analysis. I predicted the mob guy would get annoyed, but she is continuing to speak continuous drivel. Lana is a somewhat developed character, as in I could tell she is pretty sarcastic, and intuitive, but that's about it. It is in her point of view, this entire ordeal, and yet there is very little commentary of what she thinks about everything. Antony, however, seems a bit too perfect. He was a dick initially, but one could just say that was because they started on the wrong foot... but he's nice, considerate, and handsome. I guess the sneaking in thing does make him mischievous, but I really wouldn't say that is a defining characteristic. He is supposed to be mysterious, I guess, since we, the reader, knows who he is, but it just makes his character not believable... at least to me. I still hold strong on how most of these chapters do not relate to the plot at all, as in I am sure one could edit this by cutting out half of the material and it still having the same impact on the reader as this initial copy. The story should be more focused on the pivotal moments between Lana and Antony and how is "mafia" family impacts their lives... the drivel of how they get there is somewhat necessary, as it makes the situation "realistic," but most of the dialogue is pointless. The spelling and grammar are acceptable, but I have spotted some errors; however, since we are not professionals, it is not expected for our grammar/spelling to be flawless. I hope you do not perceive this as being rude or a flame. It really isn't. I do not think I know everything, but this is what I think. You could ignore me, hate me, or even delete these review(s) but I hope you at least respect and acknowledge them. I would if someone wrote such an extensive review on my work.

this story is great!

I liked the start, but I'm not so sure how I feel about it after like.. chapter four. I have yet to finish, but I intend too. The plot is very cliche, but everything is a cliche, so I'm not going to pry on that. The way it is structured is so she is telling the captor her story of how she knows him, but it is actually really off track... Like it is a lot of drivel for a simple question he asked. There is some mystery as to why she is there and how they lived with each other for three years, but I do not see where that is even gonna be answered... esp after reading 8 chapters. The chapters just seem to be a string of events that really have no relation to the plot... like what importance does Mark and Annie and this entire chapter seem to have? I do not mean to be rude, and maybe it improves, but I seriously lost most inspiration to continue reading, but as I stated before, I will finish.