I'm going to have to vote for the original title! I also wanted to tell you what a great story this is! (I always leave generic messages, but they are always true.) For some reason Mob Guy in particular really amuses me. A lot of the story is funny, but it's really cool how you have Mob Guy as an extra character to interrupt Lana's narrative. I loved when Markus said, "Let's all have a threesome!" and the Mob Guy asked, "Well, did you?" (Sorry if I didn't get the words quite right; I read it an hour ago.) I didn't think that this chapter seemed off at all, but I'm not really good at critiques. Can't wait for the next chapter!

I love love love this story!

You better update son!

I liked this chapter but I felt that in the previous chapter, Lana was almost AGREEING that Antony had a right to interfere in her family. Especially when she says, "the wellbeing of an entire nation was more important than my personal life". I feel Lana should have brought this up in addition to what she said in this chapter. I felt that the conflict she felt in the last chapter over this question wasn't carried over well to this chapter. In this chapter, she only said he didn't have a right; she didn't bring up the other side to the argument at all. So when Antony comforted her...it didn't feel right to me.

Anyway, that's just what I think.

I like the title The Kiss of Death...although I think Death is a little extreme...maybe Kissed by a Spy or...A Spy's Kiss...Trouble's Kiss...I don't know. I just don't think Death fits so well b/c Lana isn't going to die...but then maybe I'm taking it too literally. Also, if you pick that title, you'll have to change your summary which I really like; I think it's really funny. It goes really well with your current title too. So really...would it be okay if I could vote twice? Once for the original title and once for Kiss of Death?

CAN'T BELIEVE JADE CHEATED ON HIM! AND WITH WHOM?

Update soon!

summers-end

I expected more of a reaction from Antony, but then again, he never got to finish. I am intensely interested in the next chapter, so update soon.

About the title. Stay with what you have. It fits much better.

I like the original title the best...

I enjoyed reading this story very much. You put flashbacks to good use. My opinion on the title is keep it to teh original, it fits the story and gives it an optimistic notation, if you have to change it, I would change it to Bound to Happen, because she knew what Antony did for a living it, was 'bound to happen' that she'd be kidnapped. (Bounds to Happen sounds more title-ish then it can alwasy get worse too.)

Happy Writing!

Sapphire

I like the original :)

lmao: “Only people with a uterus can know. I’ll find out if the female organ restriction has been lifted after I go have breakfast with her.”

that made me laugh so hard xD omg i hope everything goes well D:

I loved the chapter. PMS. I think the original title is better.

I like the current original title.

And I liked this chapter too. It showed more of their relationship and I can't wait to find out who Jade cheated on Markus with. :)

Hey you got yourself a new reviewer! The story is great I like it! I usually don't do reviews but I thought yours deserved one and also so I can usher you about the next update.. hint hint!

Anyway I really like your plot and how you integrate the present so well with her recollections of the past. It's definitely something different, which is what captivated my attention in the 1st place. And I really like Lana's sarcastic humour as well, she has so many good puns that got me cracking.

As for the title, keep it as it is. It's definitely the most appropriate out the 3. I dont like the 2nd one, sound like one of those cliche fics. And the 3rd well, I think its a bit too extreme for where the story is going. Thats just me tho.

Update soon! :)

I've been reading this piece of writing for a while now without submitting a review (lurking if you will), but I've decided that this certainly deserves a congratulatory review (I generally don't give reviews at all, I can't seem to muster the courage needed to post anything for public view).

So... Congratulations!

Congratulations on a great story, a well written story, with well thought out and developed characters and an interesting plot. The way the story is being told works well and is integrated with great finesse.

Errors are few and far between, the one's encountered are forgivable and don't really detract from the whole. It is clear that you've taken a lot of care in your spelling, grammar and whatnot which makes the overall experience much more enjoyable.

The layout is easy on the eyes, I don't have to squint to read it nor do I have to follow the words with a finger so as to not lose my place.

As I have mentioned, the characters are well thought out and well developed, interesting enough to keep the reader's attention but not so over the top so as to make them hateable or unrealistic.

After sifting through some of the other junk at it really is a relief to come across something like this when I thought that I had finally exhausted all the worthwhile pieces of work here and it seemed like no new ones were coming through

You are a talented author. Thankyou for the read.

Cheers, Keh

I love this story - it's very original and artistically humourous, and I might just be throwing random adjectives together to make my review sound more impressive... but it sort of makes sense. Anyway, excellent story.

I absolutely love this. It's very interesting, and I think I'm in love with Antony. I can't wait to read the rest. Oh, and I like the original name.

Okay, so I know you've already posted the poll and all, but I just thought I'd post these, in case of a sequel or another (future) awesome fic of yours :)

-nobody's mannequin

-wreck of the day

-we all fall down

-famous last words

-by the way

-prelude to disaster

-an acquaintance with heartache

-time will tell

Happy holidays!

-HJ

I LOVE THIS STORY. Honestly, I was freaking showering a kind of pondering what was happening between Jade and Markus. haha.

As for the title, I do think the original fits better. Just at the end of this chapter, Lana herself said that after she solves one problem another one pops up- Hence, it always gets worse. I don't know. That's my odd logic for that. However, if you were to change it, I'd prefer Bound to Happen. Frankly, I think "Kiss of Death" is way too emo for this story.

Ha, Emo. I wanna figure out what happens to that boy. He's dead now... Antony SAYS he's OK with it, but we know... Hmm... But that name is ingenius.

Anywho, I like it as always. Can't wait to see some more!

Ooh, question: Is Antony's name supposed to be pronounced an-TH-ny or an-TU-ny, as in Mark Antony.. I was curious. XD