The imagery is great, but I'm sorry, but I don't see it how it goes with torn hearts. I'm in a daze-like phase now.

Keep writing.

... and he/she just left. wonderful. sad, but beautiful.

Reminds me of Japan. Of which I've never been. Fantastic job, it's so very vivid.

being left behind. with only three lines, you've captured it well.

wow... great detail in this poem... like the last line... and the beginning, just such a sway-like, sweet feel to it.

I love the imagery...almost magical. I like the fourth line, I don't know why...I feel like it's the saddest line, carrying the most emotion, though hidden. Well done.

existing but not for reasoni am not sure what to make of this.

beautifulbut it seems so

hopeless