Reviews for Fragrant Magnolias
rozlilta chapter 6 . 8/4/2006
Things like anorexia made characters humans, and that's very important.

Certainly, the story is slow, and really, is better in this way. Made grow up characters in a more natural way.

My last review seems a little hard, but it wasn't deliberate. There are stories unfinished and even undeveloped (I don't know if this word exist, but I hope you understand what I wanna say XD). That infuriate me.

No matter if just happen a few things in every chapter, while you keep on updating so soon. I'm very happy with that.

LEDlorien7 chapter 6 . 8/4/2006
wow, i thought maybe it was anorexia. i really like that she is deep. it annoyed me when she was like i try to be stupid because cherleaders are supposed to be, but whatever. i really love psychology, and i cant wait to take it senior year. i really like this story, and i cant wait for the next couple of chapters.
eldrin chapter 5 . 7/31/2006
In the beginning, I admit that the cheerleader thing threw me off a bit. I'm glad that I continued to read and found such interesting personalities developing! A wonderfully and subtlely rendered story...I'd like to read more.
LEDlorien7 chapter 5 . 7/30/2006
this is getting very interesting. I really like that Melanie is not your typical cheerleader. It's too bad she doesn't hang with Tracie much. she shouldn't be afraid of what people will think of her. but that's kind of the way the world is. I really liked this chapter. i like the subtle chemistry between Melanie and Victoria. I really love this story

it's not your fault chapter 5 . 7/30/2006
Again, great chapter. In all honesty, I'm trying to be helpful and find some constructive criticism, but I've yet to come up with any. I like your use of words and how well you describe things from a first person's point of view, which is hard.

This story is really good as is, I can't wait to see how you improve.
it's not your fault chapter 1 . 7/29/2006
Ok - this story is the shit. Honestly, you write good, you've got killer ideas played out in this already, it kicks ass. I wasn't expecting this latest chapter (i read all 4 chaps but i had to sign in and stuff). this is really good. author alertfav authorFav story

LEDlorien7 chapter 4 . 7/23/2006
OK, Victoria, she seems really cool, but i think she has some problems with eating (she doesn't eat) and self esteem. (Just so you know, the fact that I'm worried about your character means that you've done a good job making her realistic and likeable).

hm, interesting. Wow, Melanie is deeper that I thought. It's funny, because the kinds of parties I go to, the Marching Band parties, if some cheerleader came, we wouldn't say anything to her, but we probably wouldn't welcome her either.

yeah, drugs are not good. not good... but i still like Melanie anyway. And Victoria is cool too, even if she's a shallow cheerleader. Don't get me wrong, i really like your story. i hope you continue it, because i really want to know what happens. XP :-DLEDlorien7
rozlilta chapter 4 . 7/23/2006
Sorry, my review was for the chapter four. lol
rozlilta chapter 1 . 7/23/2006
Well, I think that victoria is a few ... idiot. I dont like people like her.

But the story is good, I read since the first chapter and I'm going on reading it.

By now, story is very slow, and in chapters a few things just happen.

I hope that you continue, because is quite interesant.
kitt chapter 3 . 7/13/2006
i love it! :)
LEDlorien7 chapter 3 . 7/12/2006
ok, you are going to have to continue this, because i am insanely curious and i really need to know what happens. and i'm really starting to like the characters, which is funny, because if they were real, they would probably hate me, and i wouldn't exactly love them either. which is why i like this story. dont ask. but i really do like it, and i hope you do continue!
LEDlorien7 chapter 2 . 7/12/2006
ok, i was kind of liking that hippie girl. i have a lot of respect for hippies except for the marijuana thing. like, yay peace and love! but that's just me. and pride buttons are good too. Andrea seems nice and friendly. Melanie is quite intriguing. Victoria probably does have a disorder. or she will. What color is Victoria's hair naturally?
LEDlorien7 chapter 1 . 7/12/2006
i love f/f, but i'm not so into your characters at the moment. i mean, it might be because i'm a nerd, but they all seem pretty superficial. Actually, mostly victoria does, but the thing is, you characterized her so well, that she's deep anyway, like how she doesn't like it when people shorten her name. and how easygoing, un-assertive, and shy she is. i find all those qualities very cute, so i guess i like her too. I'm going to keep reading this i think. i actually like the plot a lot, i don't want you to think i don't like it.
Tasyin chapter 1 . 6/27/2006
The first thing I should say is very well done. I'm really not sure why I clicked this story, I've never liked the rich girl sort of character at all. But I did, and contrary to my nature I like your character. She seems natural in that she wants to impress but doesn't really like the pretense that goes into it, or at least that's the impression I got. Andrea had just the right degree of fakeness to her, that friendly yet sort of stupid nature that a lot of girls use for protection. And Melanie just works, all of your characters do.

Also the writing is very natural. First person can be difficult to keep in character and I think you've got a good grasp of Victoria and the surroundings. The relationships are also reminiscent of ones that you would see in real life. Victoria and her parents and such. The only thing that really seemed weird was the elevator, but I think that's just because it's sort of a shock that someone would honestly put an elevator in their house. It's not even unrealistic and it certainly serves to make her monetary status a little more obvious.

So good job. I'm really honestly impressed with this. Even though it's just the first chapter these characters are very real. And good characters are really all you need to have a good story. Even if the plot sucks you'll always have that.

BreathingFlames chapter 1 . 6/26/2006
Hmm. Very, very intriguing. You have a nice style of writing and it makes me very curious to see what happens next.

Great job. Update soon, please?
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