Reviews for Longing
123454321 chapter 1 . 3/8/2008
Classic bit of angst that I believe everyone must go through.

In the second line, I think the word 'like' adds a bit of junvenile thinking to it that is not necessary.

The blunt emotion is gripping, even when the subject matter is common place.

-J.A.

Courtesy of the review marathon (link in profile).
S. Ben Beach chapter 1 . 3/26/2007
Wow, short but very serious in a way. it's got a real dreamy vibe (no pun intended) which makes it all the better. The last word made me feel as if the person in the poem was really dying to see his/her lover. Awesome work!
WannaBWriter chapter 1 . 6/30/2006
very simple yet almost anyone that reads this will very easily be able to relate. i hate those bloody dreams but i believe i have them every night. curse it all! good job!
i call it laughable chapter 1 . 6/27/2006
simple but extracting. i think we've all felt this before, & it's a terrible state to be in. i like how you didn't ramble on about the feeling, & just showed it like it is. blunt.