|Reviews for delay, side effects of:|
| ossining chapter 1 . 7/27/2006
This is beautiful. I love that you keep a family of images throughout the poem, with everything relating to a beach theme. That's nice. I really love the last stanza. This is a great poem. Keep writing! :)
| coldsunlight chapter 1 . 7/13/2006
this makes me sigh.
| Aimee Raven chapter 1 . 7/12/2006
Oh this is sad...I don't like it as much as your other stuff, it's somehow coarse, but I promise you it gets the feeling across very very well...it feels as though the person speaking is tired and weary...good job :). Love,Mia
| Honor Bound chapter 1 . 7/3/2006
i liked this one. love the last 2 lines.
thanks for the review, i think urs is the only piece of constructive critisim iv gotten so far. thanks a bunch. ill keep a look out for ya, peace.
| chaos called creation chapter 1 . 7/1/2006
the hammock line is adorable.i think you chose the perfect setting (the ocean) for this. since everyone knows about holding up the shell and hearing the ocean, but of course the person you described here is too busy listening to the sound of his own voice than anything else. lovely breakdown in the first stanza.
| Aslan Israel chapter 1 . 6/29/2006
I just got back from the beach so... this really hit me. ah, so sad.