Reviews for This Is Scaring Me
tsukiro chapter 1 . 9/26/2010
Beautiful poem.

I have read your story Honourshill while it was still posted and i loved it. It still is one of my favorite stories, and I still think about Ayah and Drew.

I really hope you get it published, because i would love to read it again.
JustPlainJane chapter 1 . 7/3/2009
That was a beautiful poem! I liked it

Great job!
unsociable chapter 1 . 4/13/2009
greetings...

it's honest, almost brutally so but very beautiful at the same time. lovely use of emjambment, creating the 'scared' effect.

i like it, really i do.

love,

unsociable
marginalia chapter 1 . 12/15/2006
This poem is beautiful. My favorite part is the last stanza, it contains true, pure emotion. Very well done.

Quincy
Three Hopeful Thoughts chapter 1 . 8/29/2006
Oh...I really like this poem.
The Rejection chapter 1 . 7/4/2006
I like the use of I/i. It's something I did in a poem myself (though one not nearly as good as this) and I think it gives further insight about the way the narrator feels about herself.

I think this ties in perfectly with Ayah in Honourshill - her fear of becoming close, of being known. What I like most about your most recent story is that it really delves into the character - Hilton Academy was good, and the characters were there, but Ayah's hypersensitivity really bring me closer to her. In a way, I can relate because even though I don't move around and even though I do have friends I've never had a terribly close relationship and while I yearn for it in some ways, in other ways I'm much more comfortable with myself and I unconsciously push people away.

But anyway, the commas break up the thoughts well, and I like the stacatto feeling of the last verse and the way the longer words beg to be spoken outloud. Good job.
bangbangstartagain chapter 1 . 6/29/2006
hey. really good poem. i could see her thinking these points. well done.

GA
Perfect Bliss chapter 1 . 6/29/2006
Ohg beautiful. just like your story... I love this so very much. You did an excelent job.
high VOLTage ZYX chapter 1 . 6/29/2006
this is nice! it ties in nicely with the fears that are present in honourshill and the flow is nice too. i also like the last couple of lines "if i didn't feel it/at all/i think/i would be scared/even more" i like that. anyways, good job
Lady Wrye chapter 1 . 6/29/2006
This is a very honest, emotion-full poem. I really like the last couple of lines.

'but if I didn't feel it, at all, I think, I would be scared, even more.'

It really evokes a lot of feelings.

Good job.
Lauren chapter 1 . 6/29/2006
Really lovely. Flows nicely. I liked the symmatry of it.