Reviews for A Cliche in Training
elephant121 chapter 1 . 7/26/2006
Very good chapter! I will definately keep reading. I found just a few mistakes that I thought I'd let you know about.

- "I sighed, grabbing my duffel bag... I sighed, pulling on a pair of jeans... I sighed, slinging my bag over my shoulder..." I believe you said sighed three times in that paragraph, you might want to change one of those to groaned or a different word just to make the paragraph flow more.

- "Mr. Jacobs frowned at ,y, then..." I'm not sure what "y" was supposed to be, maybe me?

- You had a few "raised eyebrows" in this chapter. If that was intentional, then that's fine. But if you weren't aware, I thought I would let you know.

- There was one other part where you put "was" instead of "saw" but I'm sorry, I can't find that sentence right now.

Anyways, good chapter and I'll definately stick around to read some more. Update soon :-)
incandescente chapter 8 . 7/26/2006
i liked this story! taylor and terri! :)
R0MANCEFREAK chapter 7 . 7/26/2006
thanks I like your name too! haha I like big cats! like tigers, lions and panthers and cheetahs and...well yea you get it...but i like all the animals...well yea...and Coke is awesome too! haha summerCoke Season for me who needs lemonade right? haha yea well on to the story...this chapter was cute...haha I like Taylor alot! and he stuck up for her too! and I agree with Terri Rootbeer is another fave for me...yea well update soon!
L chapter 6 . 7/25/2006
please continue, I like this story
angels and effects chapter 6 . 7/25/2006
Love this! The dialogues are totally humorous and they flow really well... though maybe you should work more on Terri's thoughts about Taylor. Great work with the different POVs!

Update soon!
R0MANCEFREAK chapter 6 . 7/14/2006
I lOVE overprotective brothers...they always make the story funnier! And how can Carter NOT like Coke? its one of the best! haha...Oh and I love, love, LOVE Terri and Taylor together!
Misty Moonweb chapter 6 . 7/13/2006
Aww, Taylor has a crush. Carter's really going to get it this time. Excellent chapter!
Misty Moonweb chapter 5 . 7/13/2006
Carter is really something else. What is he going to do, hassle the poor girl? Lol...
xtheysurelovetostare chapter 6 . 7/13/2006
funny..i really like it...update soon
kat for president chapter 6 . 7/12/2006
Don't have much to say, just that I'm readin' your story and keep goin'!

I need my fill of cliche stories to keep me going. :P

Until the next update,IB
See For chapter 6 . 7/12/2006
Ohh, I so called Taylor liking her since the beginning! XD
im messed up chapter 4 . 7/10/2006
love the story hope u update soon!
Cilissa chapter 4 . 7/9/2006
I could feel the sexual tension in this! I want to see how this turns out... Keep writing, I'll be reading,

R0MANCEFREAK chapter 4 . 7/9/2006
I like your story a lot! update soon! Aw does Taylor have a little crush on Terri? haha...once again update soon!
Mystery chapter 4 . 7/8/2006
This is good so far. I hope you update soon.
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