literally how i feel every day... short but lots of feeling behind it! :))

i understand. maybe not as bad, but i completely understand.

I could relate to this on so many levels, you wouldn't believe it. Just like you, I come from Malaysia, where 'pretty' girls are those blessed with a fair complexion, silky hair and a petite figure. My mother too, is terribly blunt and hurtful with her comments, and my spoiled brat of a brother is exactly the same way.

Just like your family, my swimming champion of a brother who also happens to constantly top his year when it comes to exams is heavily favoured compared to me, and I swear, he gets away with things I wouldn't dare dream of doing.

My mother's gives my brother her undivided attention, and proudly reiterates praises uttered by the admiring public word by word to me, wishing that I could be more like my brother.

His words always outweigh mine, his arguments are always deemed as more valid and his insults are completely justified. I could go on for ages about this particular topic, but as it is, I suppose I've bored you enough. I just wanted to prove to you that most Malaysian teenagers go through this :)

Good! :)

aww this was depressing (

nice work. i can't help but say it happens all the time when you are the older one in the family. you must give up something because he/she is younger.

I completely agree with Karin. Er...if you're Karin, then I completely agree with you. xD Being an older sibling is tough, and I don't agree with the fact that we should just accept it, just because it's part of being an older sibling.

Um...hello? What happened to equality?

We must FIGHT! -evil laughter-

Yeah, okay. Sorry about that. '

I think that this piece is really great, and completely different from what most people (including me T-T) write about nowadays. Great work! :D

Although the mom's actions are rather drastic...' Write more, kay? (: Love(d) it!

this is so sad. It's okay though, because all older siblings carry the burden on being the oldest, and therefore the title as the one who recieves less attention. Besides, some parents are more biased towards girls than boys..., in the end, it's still good though, because all parents know who truly loves them the most.

WOW! No offense but if your mom is really like that then she's a bitch..I mean if my mom did that to me I'd stand up and walk out of the funckin place. No, I would grab the plate of food from my brother and tell her we need another plate for him..No way would I stettle for that shit..and you shouldnt either.

what? Tell your mom that then! Say that people need to be equally treated and that a depressed teenager brings out lots of consequences

eh. i can totally relate. but um.. im 13 and i tell u, i don't act like that. the boy in that chapter is totally my sister. her and my mom have like a mind link, i tell you!

anyway- great story! i really liked it!~Liz

this kind of relates to me, too. its sad.

Aw, Karin... *hugs*. This was excellent. Really different from the normal fp stuff. I'm so proud of you! You've broken out of the usual fp romance mould and done something that's fantastic anyway. And it's personal, too...doesn't that scare you?

'"Don’t eat so fast, Jack," she admonished. "Leave some for your sister."

I felt a warm glow rising up from my chest. So Jack isn’t Mom’s favourite after all, I thought smugly.

Mom dropped two small slices of chicken on my plate. "There," she declared. "You can go on eating now, Jack."

I looked disbelievingly at the limp pieces of chicken on my plate, and then glanced at the fat chunks on my brother’s plate, which were disappearing at an alarming rate. I turned towards my Mom, and she shrugged unapologetically. "Let your brother eat more," she ordered. "You could lose some weight anyway."

The glow had long since faded away.'

Wow. Wow, wow, wow.

Very well-written. Excellent characterization, and excellent detail. I can actually see this happening, and I can see your feelings, too. (Ahem, you're making me hungry, by the way.) It's really beautiful. Amazing. Awesome. There are no words to describe how good this is. Seriously. Like the part about the cow...Wow. You are so good!

Sorry for the long review, Kar. But...I think I might like this even more than If Your Heart's Not In It.

M'kay, I've finally gotten around to reviewing this piece.

Not only was it well-written, but the characterizations were great-especially for something so short. You portrayed the bitter feelings well, even though the main character tries to convey an indifferent opinion to it all (at least, that's how it looked to me).

Overall? Very nice. Good job. )

No, I didn't know that rice contains kilojoules...interesting.

I like the feelings of tensions between brother and sister in this piece. The development of Jack is very strong.

My only suggestion would be to try to make your paragraphs a little longer; I think that it would highlight the strengths of your writing.