Reviews for Hard Day
Halcyon Impulsion chapter 1 . 9/22/2006
You've got some good bones in this piece. Favorite line? Well, the first one for sdtarters - it's sharp and raw. The first stanza is my favorite overall... I'd like to see the second one a little smoother. The third one - am I reading it wrong or is the formatting correct? *grin* I automatically divided the second stanza into two. The last seven lines are also strong.
wolfspawn chapter 1 . 7/3/2006
You changed it! I think I prefer the first version.
AsianScaper chapter 1 . 7/3/2006
This poem really got to me somehow. There's a poignant honesty here and the way the thoughts flow as though bleeding through the words plucked an instrument in me. It's a bit disconcerting, looking at love this way, looking at its rituals with a sense that nothing is really quite new. I particularly like the juxtaposition of modernity with the carelessness of an age before ours.

Anyhow, very rich, and very raw. :) I love it.