| Reviews for visible summer exhalation |
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   chaos called creation chapter 1 . 8/21/2006 when i read this i think about clarity. it's really something. |
| crisscross-cat chapter 1 . 7/30/2006 The langauge is nice, but it's overtaken by the fancy spacing and messing around with fonts. I think you overdid it a bit in that area. It's nice in its simplicity, and I don't think you need to make the words look pretty to have a pretty poem. |
| wind up car in motion chapter 1 . 7/5/2006 "i feel like we're the brightest thing in the world right now" |