|Reviews for He and Me|
| whattodowithabrokenheart chapter 1 . 4/11/2012
3 love this
| poopforbrains chapter 15 . 4/11/2012
Hello, dear author. (:
First off, I want to say that you did an amazing work. The story itself was cliche but the way you wrote it made the reading worth it. Add the corn and girl, you had me hooked.
Secondly, have you ever thought of editing this? There are still some few grammatical errors, but not too much. I just thought that maybe it would be a good idea to correct your grammar mistakes. (:
And lastly, the best part of the story was how you evolved the characters' personality. You showed us, readers, that they've all got their own spunk and that they're not perfect. The beautiful dose of reality. (:
All in all, job well done dear. (:
| xbelivex chapter 1 . 2/22/2012
| l.t.r.a.w chapter 1 . 1/1/2012
3 words... It is amazingggg
| lovebffs16 chapter 15 . 12/30/2011
Loved the ending! So cute! I can't believe corn brought them together though. But still ADORABLE!
*insert fangirl squeal here*
And as for your writing, really nice. Characters I felt were nicely developed. I liked the way you brought Sarah and Riley back together (as friends). It wasn't too over-the-top dramatic or anything, but simple and sweet and very believable.
| lovebffs16 chapter 6 . 12/30/2011
Okay I'm loving Ryan! Adorable.
| lovebffs16 chapter 2 . 12/30/2011
I'm a cliche person myself. I've totally realized that! Why can't FP have more cliched stories?
Great story so far, it's cute and I'm loving Ryan.
| frouwe chapter 15 . 12/22/2011
Hi. I never know how to properly begin a review, so I'm just going to jump right into answering your questions.
My favourite scene was definitely the one in chapter 14 when Riley tries to confront Ryan and they end up going all ballistic on each other, especially when he gets her in the shower. That and about every scene in which Ryan and Justin talked, the amounts of hostility and nervousness (respectively) featured were just too funny.
Most memorable line... maybe the last one, by Justin? I laughed out loud at some other points, but as a one-liner, that was probably the best.
In case you couldn't tell by now, Justin is my favourite character. Somehow he has more depth than any of the others, because he is the only one who seems to have a life outside of the story. Plus, he was a really good friend to Riley and he was constantly providing comedic relief.
Yes, I do feel the ending wrapped everything up, which really wasn't difficult since this was sort of one-tracked. I mean, there weren't any major sub-plots or anything.
To answer the last question, I feel that I should first read some of your other stories. While this was far from perfect (by which I don't mean it was awful - it was entertaining and not unbearably cliché and not at all confusing), it's far better than a lot of stuff I've read.
| Asa Usa chapter 15 . 10/30/2011
I KNEW it! Justins GAY! I just knew it . . .
| Aradia Cloud chapter 15 . 10/29/2011
My fav scene was the LAST ONE BABY!
| Sica chapter 15 . 10/29/2011
ahah the ending was last line made me laugh so hard. good job!
| Rosedreamer101 chapter 15 . 9/29/2011
LOLOLOL, UPRUPT ENDING WITH JUSTIN'S GAY PROCLAMATION, LOL. gotta love him :D and i do love ryan and riley. LOL never met a girl named riley
| PandahNinjah chapter 2 . 9/8/2011
Why do I have a feeling when you're gonna answer that question i'm gonna fell stupid?
I don't know
| PandahNinjah chapter 1 . 9/8/2011
What the heck is a cliche?
| PandahNinjah chapter 15 . 9/8/2011
This story has a LOT of reviews.
How? Wow that was a really stupid question.
It's because you're a good writer.