|Reviews for Sweethearts|
| siddika chapter 23 . 1/20/2007
| The Intelligent Designer chapter 12 . 12/26/2006
I've really enjoyed reading this so far. The story is interesting, and I'm curious to find out what happens, when I have more time to read...
| Abby Sequioa chapter 23 . 11/25/2006
I love it. I love it I love it I love it. it's so sweet and I LOVED the lunchroom scene. it was beyond adorable. you just got added to my favorite authors list, just for the last 2 chapters of this
| Guest chapter 23 . 11/18/2006
This is a really good story. I really enjoyed reading it.
| 12pinkroses chapter 24 . 11/9/2006
I didn't feel like signing in as angel718...and by that you should know who this is. :) Yes, I did read the ENTIRE THING TODAY! JUST NOW! I am so glad I read this. It's adorable! They're all such...lovely characters. I actually don't hate Johnny, believe it or not. Really, really good story, dear. Like it loads. :D:D Keep writitng!
| Tzotel431 chapter 23 . 11/8/2006
-Who was your favorite character?
Definately Steven. He was so sweet and cute! I can't wait to read this new story on him!
-What was your favorite part/chapter?
My favorite part, (no duh) was when they made up and kissed for the first time! It was sobeautiful and sweet, well written too!
-Is there anything you think I should improve on in my writing?
Maybe, more description to your story. It adds more depth, you know?
-Do I have any particular strengths?
You are a wonderful writer. I enjoyed the plot and the way that you moved the story along instead of making it go too slow.
I hope this helps you some. I used to ask my readers to do this same thing, most of them didn't, so I stopped. I really loved this story and I can't wait to read more!
| RhythmOfMySoul chapter 23 . 11/8/2006
This story was really good. The one thing about it though was how cliche the end was. I mean, it brought everything into a full circle, but it felt kind of detached to me. I don't know maybe I'm weird.
Fav character? The guy who is friends with Stephen and Emma who Stephen told that he was gay.
Fav part/chap? Don't really have one.
Something to improve? Less cliche ish. One thing about this story (that I'm realizing as I'm looking back) is the fact that you made it seem kind of detached from real life. Like as if those characters were living in their own little bubble. They rarely had contact with others outside of their little group. And if they did the contact was only to get away from someone in the little group.
Yeah, basically make it more real. Don't just focus on your characters, include the world around them as well.
Strengths? keeping a person in character and separating the charaters. This could be worked on a little bit but for the most part each character had their own personality and you didn't have their words stary from their personality.
| J.Sal chapter 23 . 11/6/2006
awesome story!i loved it!
| RhythmOfMySoul chapter 22 . 11/5/2006
I LOVED IT! Great job!
| Tzotel431 chapter 22 . 11/4/2006
Hey, I liked this chapter and I am happy you posted so soon! That made me happy. The fact that she forgave him and then they kissed! That was awesome! I'll be sad when its done...you'll have toupdate the other story too!
| Rebecca chapter 22 . 11/4/2006
I loved this chapter i am so glad that they finally realized who each other was. yay!
| darktink chapter 22 . 11/4/2006
OH MY GOD! loved it! my opinion you should make a sequel when they go to college or when its their last year of high and then when they get married
| Tzotel431 chapter 21 . 11/4/2006
Great chapter! This was the perfect way for her to find out, the fact that he kept it from her lends to her anger, its great! Update soon!
| Neda chapter 21 . 11/3/2006
Why is Emma angry at Paul? Wasn't Emma the one that left? Is she pissed because he didn't tell her sooner? Cos i'm confused. Love the story, though
| RhythmOfMySoul chapter 21 . 11/3/2006
oh snap. Great ending. I loved it!