Reviews for You Still Didn't Leave |
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![]() ![]() ![]() i love Don already 3 |
![]() ![]() ![]() wat! you can't just leave a cliffhanger like that! you need to have a sequel! please! |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was amazing and I hope you write a sequel |
![]() ![]() ![]() heaps good story |
![]() ![]() ![]() you have got to be kidding me! the ending totally contradicts your title and all that went on in the story. the story was great except for the bad ending. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was pure, undiluted awesomeness. Except I refuse to believe someone as feelingless as Robin's mum could exist. Anyway, very good. Favorited. |
![]() ![]() ![]() woah... i was not expecting this story to go in this direction. Its... very suprising. But i really like it. Not too many people address these kinda issues in their fics and i really like the way you have here. Bravo! (i have always wanted to use that word... heehee) |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like this so far, i cant wait to see what happens next. this is so wierd (and im merely pointing out the irony not criticizing, because i love how u wrote the annoying chem teacher part) I took chem last year & my teachers name was Mr. moss and he was the exact opposite of your Mr Moss. He was probably the best/funniest teacher ive ever had, its just wierd to think of him as mean. But, like i said, i like how youve written this Moss to be a complete jerk. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay.. I really liked the theme of this story, you had me hooked from the beginning.. I loved everything about it, you did the research, mostly.. I had to say that with the third kid, you said that the mother used artifical insemination, they usually do that procedure if you are infertile, and the person uses it on themselves, I think the more proper term would have been, they used a surrogate(another woman to carry the baby).. Other than that I loved your story, it was clever and witty, I was slightly disappointed by the ending, it seemed too cruel and abrupt, but, also realistic.. But, I think that Don would have made a sacrifice to be with her, he seemed to be that type of guy.. I hope you write a sequel and have him come to his senses and go get his woman! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved it, but I think the epilogue coulda been taken out. It's just, wow, OMG THEY GOT TOGETHER, and then it's OMG THEY BROKE UP, and all of this within seven sentences (or 15, or whatever) and I just think it's too much, too fast... I dunno. Otherwise, it's awesome. -Biohazard |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, initially, I started reading this to get away from the boredom of my life, you know, just a couple chapters, maybe not till the end, kind of thing. But this is pulling me in. Great writing. -Biohazard |
![]() ![]() ![]() GAH! Sequel!~ Please? Love it. ... SEQUEL! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved the story, everything except the ending, seeing as 1) they broke up, even though you left something open for a sequel, and 2) it sounded like you were just trying to get it out of the way after working so hard to write the story as it was. The epilogue sounded as if you were tired of writing your story and you just wanted to finally end it, which I can sympathise with. As I've grown more experienced in writing, I've found that it is more productive to take a break from the story, no matter how long it is, and then, when you really feel ready once more, continue and finish the story at a leisurely pace, that way you don't end it with just a few short paragraphs, giving the impression that you just didn't care enough. Don't get me wrong though, I don't mean any offense, just some friendly suggestions. I really did love the story and the plot and the way Don and Robin got together. Good luck! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh! You are so, so frustrating! All this trouble to get them together, and then, BAM! They had to split, and are over-the-phone friends. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh, you don't know how much fun that is! I speak Spanish, I learned it as a toddler, and watching people stare at me when they hear me speaking Spanish is like watching a goldfish. Gape, gape, gape, snap mouth shut and outright stare. Sometimes they ask me if I can speak English, but I think it's amusing. I mean, come on, I learned to speak English right after Spanish. |