|Reviews for Fox Tales|
| Surmising Notations chapter 1 . 7/14/2006
The summary captured my attention but as you state at the end, it will take a while before you get to that point.
The grammar is a little rough. Some misused words here and there. I suggest that you proof read or have someone else check it for you. For instance, in the following sentence, "His parents divorced when he was just four years old, he's been shuffled between both if his parents as they fought for custody over him, and he's always been jealous of her younger half-sister, Akane, who is a child prodigy, and is already a rising star in the political community at the age of fourteen."
First the entire sentence is far too long. It's okay to make them shorter. Second, "shuffled between both if his" I think maybe you needed an of instead of if here. And at "jealous of her younger half-sister, Akane" who is her? Did you mean his?
Things like that you want to clean up a little. Good start.