now, that's more like it. i like this chappy alot. it's juicy with info and you don't seem to be able to breathe. it really is one thing after the other. i can tell Dee and her mum seem to have a bit of not getting along thing going on... cool! she's not just one of those vain teens then... ehem... like many of us. and great job telling off vincent because he's kinda possesive. what was really cute was jeremy asking her out. and try to give Dee a chance to think some things over. the girl just doesn't know what tp do with her busy life... i'm just kidding. i love this chapter and it certainly made up for the previous one. thanks for your sweet comment about Grace. i like her better too...

Okay. So I liked this chapter much better than the last one. I like how you explained about Chase and Dee, and I did quite like Jeremy coming in in this chapter. But what I don't get is why Dee said yes to Jeremy is she still likes Vince...Is she in denial? Is she just caught up in her conversations with her mom and Vince? Anyway, so yeah, there's that.

Okay, so next thing on the agenda. What's with her mom? She just sort of randomly appears...Are her parents divorced? Is that it? Did you mention this before and I simply had a memory lapse and forgot?

So yeah, that's the basics of what I have slight issues with in this chapter. I'm happy it came up so soon though :D

Write more, jah?

HOW DID HE REPLY TO HER? SHE'S AN IDIOT!

So she likes him, he 'thinks' he likes her, Jeremy likes her, her mom is getting married, AND, there's the whole Chase, Ryder thingy? I like those names though. Keep writing!

Out-Spoken-Runaway

okay, firt off... your poetry IS NOT pathetic... second off, thank YOU for the amzing reviews and the nice compliments toward me in the beginning and end of your chapters...then... THREE DAYS GRACE! yea you rock bitch! lmaoI so love them and yea! w00t!

and I cannot wait for the next chapters!until then-Victoria

ok completely in love with this story!heehee

Um...

Is she going to fall for Ryder? And why didn't Vince get...like he did when Dee was talking to the pizza guy (Ryder) when he caught her? Eh?

_ I'm beginning to think Vince doesn't like her at all...or more than a friend. OOH, FLIRTING! Keep writing!

Out-Spoken-Runaway

A little confusing but still so good! AH I'm so happy you chose Ryder! I gave you that name idea! I feel so loved! Ah! kay, calm down. I can't wait til the next chapter. I know my 6th of Auto Shop was short but it was originally supposed to go to chapter 5 to make chap. 5 longer. It just didn't work out that way. anyway LOVE YOU!

Okay, so you want constructive critism, right? Well, I think there should be more Jeremy...I mean, you introduced him in the beginning, and now he's like faded in to nobody? And who is Chase? You never really say anything about him. Unless you did in the beginning and I forgot because my memory sucks ass. And I dunno, it seems sort of short, like things are happening fast for no real reason or whatever...I could see something else happening in this chapter other than what you wrote. But that's okay, short chapters are good sometimes. And I think maybe a novel other than The Great Gatsby...I know it sort of has to do with historical events, but it's a 11th grade english novel where I'm from...So maybe something like...uhh...More historical? Yeah, I'm helpful.

This probably sounds a lot more like critism than constructive critism but it's not how it's meant to be, it's just the things I noticed. The grammar and spelling seem fine, I didn't notice any mistakes there, though I wasn't really looking.

This review ended up being long. I hope you appreciate what I said up there rather than be annoyed by it...I'm not trying to flame you or anything. I really can't wait till the next chapter :) MORE ROMANCE! (yeah, I'm a hopeless romantic).

::wearing a big pout:: hello! it took you all that long and this is it? i mean come on you have to do better than that if you're going to be gone for so long. i just love your style so much it was cruel to see such a short chapter. anyways, i think it is good but you gotta focus somewhere because this is really getting big. her circle of friends and all. i mean come on, there is Vince, Jeremy, Ryder and Chase. not to mention the girls. what i'm trying to say is it is absolutely cute and all but it sounds more like a biography rather than a story with a plot line. i hope i'm not being a meanie here but i would love to see things made clear in the coming chapter and where is that Dee just has to deal...thanks for the amazing review and when memoirs of a butterfly comes to a finale which i expect will be soon, i have a new one and i hope you make my day and review it like you did with Aaliah. :))

Haha...just realized I reviewed chapter 4, not chapter 5...I'm not the brightest bulb on the Christmas tree, am I...

I was gonna have some names for pizza dude, but seems like you're not in need of them anymore. )

Argh, okay, Vince is getting all possessive and freaky...not good. I'd go with Jeremy, personally. Um, not that anything is necessarily gonna happen there, 'cause Dee and Jeremy are just sort of...hanging out, I guess. I'm rambling. Yes I am. I will cease now. Questions from my last review still stand. Although apparently pizza dude is making another appearance...

Hey there, you. I finally got a chance to read your story. Wow. Looks like a lot is going on. Dee seems to have not one, not two, but three potential guys! Vince, obviously...then possibly Jeremy, and then, randomly, pizza dude. Unless I've misinterpreted things? -shrugs- Anyway, it's very interesting. I guess no matter what happens, Dee will end up with some hot guy and Leslie gets her dream guy too.

If I had to offer criticism, I'd just say to watch your tenses - you switch from past to present and it gets confusing. Otherwise...well, the style of the story if very raw, as if Dee herself were thinking it as it happens. Which is not a bad thing.

Still, you've got me a little curious - who is pizza dude? And will we see more of Jeremy? And what's Wilson's problem? )

AH! Loved it! I especially loved her little outburst in class! Classic! Oh looks like vince is haten' on Jeremy...oh. There's gonna be some bloodshed...if there is can you make sure they have swords? Just kidding. Sorry it took me so long to review. I started school on monday and wow, my week has been hetic! I already have like 3 quizzes! AH! Great job by the way, update soo dollface!

P.s. I see u changed your penname!

o0o0 its the dude!

o0o0o0 heehee!

cool! it doesn't take much wits to realise vince likes Dee. good chapter cherryblossoms. you so remind me of an old dear friend who i lost contact with. she was just like you even in her writing style. :D