Reviews for Above the Surface
JK17 chapter 10 . 9/4/2017
Wow, this was very well done. I think what impressed me the most was how scientific this sounded and felt. You obviously did your research as well as expanded on possibilities making this true "science" "fiction". The story is also very good length and didn't feel too short or too long. It flowed very well and that's a very important element in fiction writing. When you have space for an average novel which is around 300 pages there is a lot you have to work on in terms of pacing - this was perfect! I really like the character, you described externally as well as internally so I got a clear image, and his motivations made sense. In a way it's simple, but it's also expansive at the same time. You didn't have to shove a ton of traits or qualities because they would have had little to do with the primary story. I also like the government conspiracy twist, and I think there are a lot of real people in the government like Vacouver, and nice code name too. You made he care about the character, you piqued my interest in the story, the science was very intriguing and you mixed fact with fiction very well. I am very impressed with this piece. I can't really think of ways to criticism it. There might have been a few typos and a couple words got stuck together, but I'm not a Nazi about it like certain type of people are. I think I'd give this a 10/10. This piece was a pleasure to read :)
xxx1000 chapter 10 . 3/29/2014
Very good story and I like the ending line! Lots of science and tech that actually sounds like it makes sense! The character of Greg is well described and relatable. Nice work!
StarsandSteel chapter 2 . 6/24/2007
I like the scientific explanations. The theories and experiemnts and tests all make me think outside of normal everday life. That's always a plus. Usually I can only get that in professional science fiction or philosophy.

There were a couple times when I would almost say that parts of it were cliche or I'd seen before in late night binges on the sci-fi channel, but in the end it was pretty unique.

Another little detail that I like was that you made not only the main characters plausible, but their bosses too. Like that little conversation between Greg and Ralph about the programs. It was more than just a plot device, it was two people with differing points of view. Great job.
Duble A chapter 10 . 11/9/2006
Well this is quite a nice little storry, good read. although it is alot diferent than The Seminary Gang, it still cought my intrest and it looks like theres room for a sequill? Maby?
Reaper chapter 10 . 9/19/2006
Wow...I'm surprised at myself for not reading this and leaving a review.

Very of sad it was a bit short though...hoping the new one will be lengthy...lengthy ones are great if they are good, like this one.
criti-sized chapter 10 . 8/28/2006
Perfecto, I think this was a very nicely ended story. That's all I can really say, I liked the first part before the end, but the second part seemed a bit rushed. Other than that it was literally a nice story.
criti-sized chapter 6 . 8/28/2006
Too bad his image didn't come before the even occured. Anyways, the last two chapters were again entertaining, I don't know what to say, for this to be a short book and be complete, it seems very good. I'll continue on.
criti-sized chapter 4 . 8/28/2006
Well, that was very effective, I had figured something had to happen soon enough, but I wasn't thinking that he would be inside the rocket when it fired. In order to get rid of my curiousity, I'll just move to the next chapter.
criti-sized chapter 3 . 8/28/2006
I think this was the most productive chapter, not only because of the explanation, but it seems to show something is coming. I'll try to finish it today.
criti-sized chapter 2 . 8/27/2006
Another greatly interesting chapter. I liked the deep descriptions in it, but as a suggestion, I might say that possibly in conversation you could state who's talking, inable to not confuse the readers.
criti-sized chapter 1 . 8/26/2006
This a very interesting prologue, it definitely has me wondering what happens next, but since I have to work, I have no choice but to come back later. Expect my reviews.
mel-mayr chapter 2 . 8/24/2006
one word GREAT lol cant wait until i get to the next chapter tonight after work!looking forward to reading more *Mel
Mr.Satire chapter 10 . 8/22/2006
THAT WAS AWESOME! I love the ending (although I'm sad it ended so soon). I'm still a little puzzled about the whole 'alley incident,' but anyway, more about the ending: I love how you tied in the words, 'above the surface' into his point of view instead of just how the government buildings look above the surface (as opposed to their real, underground purposes). Finally, the thing about visiting Kate made it worthy of becoming a major motion picture if only it was expanded a little (hint, hint). However, I wouldn't want you to ruin it with a sequel if you view that it's best as a solitary work. I could express my views of your works best with the following sentence: You're going on my favorite authors list, and my alert list, and this is going on my favorite stories list.

P.S. I also love how you DON'T USE PROFANITY! Also, thank you for reading WINNER TAKES OIL chapter 3. Let me assure you that chapter 4 is on the way! Finally, let me assure you that the plot is going somewhere. I have a general idea of how its going down, but not all the way along. There are many 'thrillers' coming up!
Mr.Satire chapter 9 . 8/22/2006
This is so great! I just finished Chapter 9. Jeez, Bob, you can crank out the chapters faster than I can keep up with them! I'm glad, though, because it satisfies my interest!
Mr.Satire chapter 8 . 8/21/2006
This was an AWESOME chapter! There was so much action! Not to mention, you leave me hanging in suspense. I'm puzzled about why that agent wants Greg killed and what Vancouver meant by "Fine, but what if he doesn't hold up?" By the way, puzzled is good! It's a true thriller.

P.S. Thanks for reading WINNER TAKES OIL chapter 3! Also, I got your e-mail, but after I had written back and went to send, my computer informed me that that wasn't possible for some reason, so I would've had to write it AGAIN! Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter and am interested in your next story, "The Seminary Gang." Keep up the good work!
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