|Reviews for The Deceiver|
| SailorPikaAngel chapter 24 . 12/24/2016
I find this story interesting as we still are not sure what Valin is- is he a demon? Some type of hybrid? Also what is the importance of all these deals? I think what stood out to me the most is when Alex takes control back. The scene where she verbally tears into him and regains some of the power she lost is amazing! Also when she speaks to his unconscious body that she feels guilty but needs to take some control back because that is how the game is played. Even though I hate it when men hits women, I understand the importance because he will be unable to physicially harm her and that she was saved because of it when he loses himself. However, it reinforces what she mentioned previously about him "conditioning" her for pain when he has caused her pain in the past. I hope you update this soon!
| annayh44 chapter 24 . 10/19/2015
Nooooooooo you are saying the published story gonna be completely different so why not complete it till end. . .it gonna be no harm. .this story so damn amazing. .still too mysterious i didnt understand it . .you just leave it :( :( atleast tell me the name of book if it is already published or going to be published :(
| FamishedNight chapter 24 . 4/3/2014
Awesome. Update soon?
| Kikinii chapter 1 . 7/5/2013
Great chapter. :D
| KrnYong chapter 14 . 4/15/2013
Jeez, a girl in high school who never does homework? I was wondering how she got any school stuff done if all she does every night is party, but man, I'd like to know what her plans for the future are :P
| KrnYong chapter 5 . 4/14/2013
Gahhh Valin is so creepy. I wonder what he really wants with Alex? And what he really is?... I like this whole Faustian contract kind of thing he has with her, even though she didn't sell her soul she kinda might as well have.
| Guest chapter 24 . 6/28/2012
Hey there, I was wondering if you have any updates for how your rewrite and publishing is going?
| Kikinii chapter 24 . 6/21/2011
To be honest i'm really sad to find out that you're not continuing this story on fiction press anymore. I know you think your writing for this story sucks but I thought it was well written, of course their is a lot of room for improvement, but overall you are a genuinely good writer. I'm glad I chanced across this story, I read it all in one go, so took me about five to six hours. Good luck with getting the new version of this story published and any other stories you decide to write in the future. I would definitely buy your books. :)
| Kikinii chapter 16 . 6/21/2011
| Kikinii chapter 4 . 6/21/2011
Wow, this story is getting interesting! I love it! xD
| JinxO chapter 24 . 3/13/2011
Finally get to comment! lol. Anyway, I have to say I'm seriously in love, no more like obsessed with this story, I would help and put some criticism, but honestly. I can't think of any! This story is just so perfect!
The characters have such personality it's amazing! I can connect on so many levels! You've done a great job!
Also as a side note, you know Alex and her father Dan? what's weird is my name 'is' Alexis, whilst my fathers name is Daniel. I'm called Alex for short, and My dad is called Dan for short, weird right? haha
| enoeno chapter 24 . 9/20/2010
I'm very disappointed at this point. I loved this story. I spent a whole day non-stop reading it and now I learn it's never going to be finished? I'm pissed, frankly.
I'm a writer too, so I understand. The difference between you and me is that I keep the stuff I want to get published eventually OFFLINE. OFFLINE! SO I have NO ONE to disappoint when I suddenly decide to rewrite it. NO ONE to absolutely betray when they finally got into my characters. If that means working eleven years on a story like I have, then SO BE IT. UGH.
I'm no coward, so if you have something to say back to defend yourself here's my email:
Good luck on getting published anyhow
| L'Archange chapter 1 . 9/4/2010
I'm so sad! I can't believe you're not continuing this. To be honest, I don't think I would have read it if I had know that. It was enjoyable, I can't deny that. But I do wish you the best and hope to hear about this being published. Please keep me in the loop because I really want to know how this ends. :)
| Ghost n' Ghoul Girl chapter 18 . 6/20/2010
ok, now my favorite chapter title is blitzkrieg. why you ask? because it sound awesome. one more thing, i really like how you have the chapter title, then underneath it a question that explains it. its awesome. keep up with the great work
| Ghost n' Ghoul Girl chapter 17 . 6/20/2010
ok, i just wanted to say this, if someone came up and asked me what my favorite part is in your story, i would say your chapter titles. i just love them, my favorite one so far is Your Hand is Face Up. i don't really know why i love them so much, but i do. their different, and they alone get you interested in the chapter because your like, cool chapter title, so how will the chapter itself relate? and its so cool, because you don't just go and tell how it relates, but the reader has to figure it out themselves. keep up the good work. and by the way, i LOVE the story itself so far too. for now, i will read on!